Can someone look over my essay please. Tell me anything that needs changing. Any feedback would be great. Give suggestions if you have any I would really appreciate it.
ps: I know it's long: 1,301 words
Ernest Hemingway
Ernest Hemingway was a great writer who influenced many writers through his stories and novels. His greatest goal was to become the best writer. His fictions were focused on his personal life experience. The stream of events in his life experience can be reflected on his writing. Hemingway once stated that "the writer's job is to tell the truth." He wanted his writing "to get the feeling of actual life across--not just to depict life or criticize it--but to actually make it alive." If he can make his characters true enough they would mean many things. Thanks to his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines he was able to find the truth in his writing. During his quest for truth he had many leading writers helped him enhance his ability as a writer. Ernest Hemingway gained experience writing through newspaper journalism and furthered his literary education through his many literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway developed his writing through working as a reporter and journalist in newspapers and magazines. He contributed in writing stories for the school newspaper, The Trapeze, and its literary magazine, Tabula. He contributed three stories during his junior year and during that time it revealed his early interest in violent death and suicide. Hemingway had written 24 articles for The Trapeze between November 1916 and May 1917. The quality of his work was not exceptional. Although the work he submitted wasn't all that great, but he gained experience that would help prepare him for his first job after graduating from high school. He took up the job as a cub reporter after high school with the Kansas City Star, one of the leading newspapers in America during that time period. He was given advice from first-rate journalistic professionals. Hemingway has to make his writing meet specific standard requirements with the Kansas City Star style sheet. The reporters have to avoid adjectives, use short sentences, brief paragraphs, vigorous English, and fresh phrases. This style of writing became the permanent influence in Hemingway's own style as a fiction writer. Hemingway covered the police station and the city hospital, and interviewed victims of accidents and violent crimes. By the end of April 1918, Hemingway left the Kansas City Star to join an American Red Cross ambulance unit in World War I. After his return from the war he worked very hard as a writer. He tried to follow a formula to sell his stories to any mass-market magazines such as The Saturday Evening Post. In the end the stories he submitted was in vain. His work was rejected because he couldn't find his own narrative voice or his own material. In January 1920, Hemingway left for Toronto and became a freelancer for the Toronto Star. After his marriage with Hadley Richardson he worked at Paris as a correspondent for the Toronto Star. He returned to Chicago in May and worked for the Co-operative Commonwealth, a monthly magazine. In November 1922, he was in Lausanne, Switzerland covering a peace conference on a territorial dispute between Greece and Turkey. Hemingway left Paris and returned to Toronto where he became a full-time reporter with the Toronto Star. After Christmas, Hemingway resigned his position as a reporter at Toronto Star. In February 1924, he returned to France where he worked as an unpaid assistant editor for transatlantic review, a journal founded by Ford Madox Ford that publish experimental fiction. Ford decided to go to New York to raise more money for the review. Ford wrote an announcement in the July issue that he is leaving the editorial duties to Hemingway while he is in New York. Upon Ford's return from New York he saw the contributor list for August issue. Ford thought that Hemingway had used the opportunity to publish his American friends' work while he was gone. Hemingway felt that his criticism was unfair because he had worked so hard for the review. In January 1925, the transatlantic review came to an end. His days as a journalist helped him gain the experience he needed to become a fiction writer. Journalism was only part of what made him a successful writer. He also had many leading writers at that period as his literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway had many writers as his literary influences that helped him become a better writer. These influences include, Sherwood Anderson, Ezra Pound, and Gertrude Stein. In Chicago Hemingway befriended with Sherwood Anderson, an author of Whinesburg Ohio. Anderson encouraged Hemingway's writing efforts and convinced Hemingway to go to Paris because it was the place for any serious writers. Anderson's letters of introduction played a vital role for Hemingway's literary development. Anderson supplied Hemingway with letters of introduction to: Gertrude Stein, leader of the American expatriates, Sylvia Beach, owner of the English-language bookstore Shakespeare and Company, James Joyce, writer who novel Beach was about to publish, and Ezra Pound, the influential poet. Anderson also mailed an introductory letter to Lewis Galantiere, one of his translators in France. Each of his letter praised Hemingway's extraordinary talent. Pound and Stein were important in his literary development. In February 1922, Hemingway met Ezra Pound, who was a major figure involved in the imagist movement during the period between 1909 and 1918. Pound became one of his most important literary friends. Pound was the one who helped get his early work published. Pound supervised Hemingway's literary education and recommended that he read works by T.S. Eliot and James Joyce. Pound encouraged him to delete unnecessary words and to give images meaning. Pound had submitted six of Hemingway's poems to the Dial, but the magazine editor rejected because Pound had also submitted T.S. Eliot's "The Waste Land." Pound also accepted one of his stories for the Little Review, but unfortunately the editors rejected the submission. Harriet Monroe, an editor of Chicago little magazine, Poetry: A Magazine of Verse accepted six of Hemingway's poems. Even though Pound's editorial influence on his work wasn't as great compare to Eliot's, but was responsible for promoting his reputation and helped shape his career. In March 1922, Hemingway met Gertrude Stein. Stein pointed out that his novel contained too much description, and not particularly good description. She also pointed out that the heartless seduction scene in "Up in Michigan" made the story not suitable to be publish. Stein told Hemingway to "Begin over again and concentrate." Hemingway observed Stein's style of writing. Her writing was full of repeated words, phrases consisted of preposition and its object, and present participles. He credited Stein for helping him understanding prose rhythms. Hemingway said that he had learned how to write as much from painters as from other writers. He had studied paintings by Henri Matisse, Georges Braque, Juan Gris, Pablo Piasco, and Paul Cézanne. These are the painters that he admire because of their ability to capture the landscape. Paul Cézanne is his most favorite painter out of all of his other admired painters. In the ending of "Big Two-Hearted River" Nick Adams says that he wants to write the way Cézanne painted. When Hemingway returned to France Pound introduced him to Ford Madox Ford at his studio and Ford hired him as his assistant editor for the transatlantic review. His literary influences helped develop his path as a writer.
Ernest Hemingway became a successful writer through experience he gained from newspaper journalism and furthered development from his many literary influences. Through his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines helped fulfilled his quest for truth. Hemingway observed and learned different style of writing through leading writers of the time he had met in Paris. He used the knowledge he had gained into his writing. Without the help his literary influences he wouldn't be the Ernest Hemingway whose stories and novels influenced generation of writers.
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1. "can be reflected on his writing." = not on but IN
2. "had many leading writers helped him enhance" = not helped but either "who helped" OR "helping"
3. "all that great, but he gained experience" = delete the word "but"
4."the stories he submitted was in vain." = not was but WERE (plural subject)
5. "he worked at Paris" = not at but IN
6. "transatlantic review," = as the name of a publication, it should be capitalized = Trsnsatlantic Review
7. "that publish experimental" = that published.....then there are two verbs "is" but told in the past tense, they should both be WAS
8. "for August issue" = for THE August issue
9. "the transatlantic review" = the same error as above
10. In Chicago, (add comma)....."befriended with Sherwood Anderson" = drop the word "with"....Whinesburg, Ohio (add comma between city and state)
11. "writer who novel Beach" = whose novel.....each of his letterS (plural)
12. "magazine editor rejected" add the word "them"
13. "an editor of Chicago little magazine," = of Chicago's little magazine
14. "but was" = drop "but" and add "it was ..."
15. (this may be out of sequence because these tired eyes have trouble skimming up and down, up and down..."wasn't as great compare to Eliot's" = compared to
16. "not suitable to be publish" = published
17. "consisted of preposition" = a preposition
18. "for helping him understanding prose" = helping him understand
19. "that he admire" = admired
20. F"returned to France Pound" = France, Pound (you must have a comma or it looks like a man named France Pound!
21. "transatlanticv review = capitalized as the name of a publication
22. "returned to France Pound" = France, Pound = without the comma it looks like there is a man named France Pound!
23. "magazines helped fulfilled" = drop the first word of the sentence "Through" and the rest is okay, except for "helped fulfill"
14. learned A ifferent style of writing
15. into his writing? IN his writing
16. Without the help OF his....generations of writers
Just be sure each separate topic is in a sepaate paragraph. There is a great deal of repetition, but perhaps ou were requird to write so many words.
Have noticed short sentences in Hemmingway's works?!!
Sra
thank you very much for your help
any suggestions that I could make this essay better?
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Overall, your essay is well-written and provides a good overview of Ernest Hemingway's development as a writer. Here are a few suggestions to further improve your essay:
1. Break up your paragraphs: Some of your paragraphs are quite lengthy, which can make it difficult for readers to follow your ideas. Consider breaking them into smaller paragraphs to improve readability and organization.
2. Use transitional phrases: Incorporate transitional phrases to help guide your reader through the different sections of your essay. For example, you can use phrases like "In addition," "Furthermore," or "Moreover" to introduce new points or ideas.
3. Provide more specific examples: While you mention Hemingway's experiences as a journalist and his interactions with literary influences, provide more specific examples or anecdotes to support your statements. This will add depth to your analysis and make your essay more engaging.
4. Proofread for grammar and punctuation errors: Make sure to carefully proofread your essay to catch any grammar or punctuation mistakes. This will ensure that your essay is polished and professional.
Remember, this is just a starting point for your revisions. It's always a good idea to have someone else read over your essay for feedback as well. Good luck with your revisions!