Ms. Sue I need your help for the second paragraph for my essay. I need 3 supporting deatils for this paragraph but I got 1, need 2 more.
Rosa Parks wanted people (blacks) to be free and have a better education. Most blacks couldn't go to the same schools as whites they went to segregated schools.
PLEASE HELP!
THANK YOU!
Think about what else you've read about this time period in the 1950s.
Blacks were second class citizens in the South.
They had to sit on the backs of buses and give up their seats to whites.
Their schools were inferior
They couldn't use the swimming pools when whites were using them.
They had to step into the street when the walk was crowded with whites.
They couldn't eat in most restaurants.
They were frequently insulted by whites.
They couldn't get many jobs that whites held.
They were not welcomed in most white churches.
I'll use the last four in my own words.
Thank You!!!!
I'm going to post my essay soon (just intro and body pargraphs, tommrrow in class we r doing our conclusion then when I'M done w/ it i'll post it)
Rosa Parks
A person's characteristics are shaped by the setting and beliefs of society during a specific time period affects on individuals actions and lifestyle. Rose Parks a former civil rights leader was influence by the time period which she live. Rosa Parks help million of people by the time period which she lived.
Rosa Parks wanted all people to be treated equally and justly and not be discriminated against. African American people were treated unfairly. The law states that black people and white people should remain separate. Before the civil rights movement African American in the south couldn't go to the same schools as whites. They couldn't go to any places like parks or swimming pools as the whites. In the city buses of Montgomery the black people have to sit at the back and whites sit in the front. But the blacks have to give up their seats if the white person wanted to sit down,
Rosa Parks wanted people (blacks) to be free and have a better education. Most blacks couldn't go to the same schools as whites, they went to segregated schools. Most blacks couldn't eat in most restaurants with the whites or without them. They were most of the time insulted by whites and beat. The blacks couldn't get many jobs that whites held. They were not welcomed in most white churches.
Rosa Parks became a civil rights leader. On December 1, 1955 in the city buses of Montgomery after Rosa Parks sit in the front of the bus where the white people seat. Rosa was tired after a long day of work as a seamstress for a Montgomery, Alabama, department store and tired of the segregation laws. Rosa took a seat with a man who was next to the window. They were not disturbed until they reached the third stop after she boarded the bus. At this point a few white people boarded the bus, and one white man was left standing. When the driver noticed him standing, he spoke to them (the man and two women across the aisle) and told them to let the man have the seat. The other three all stood up the second time after he barked at them. But the driver saw Rosa still sitting there. He said to give up her seat and she said, "No, I will not." Then he said that she has to arrest her, Rosa didn't care, and she was tired of the laws. When the police came they send her to jail for breaking the law.
I didn't write my conclusion yet bcuz we didn't work on it so we are doing it tommrrow. Then when I'm done with it then I can show it to you.
A person's characteristics are shaped by the setting and beliefs of society during a specific time period affects on individuals actions and lifestyle. This is a run-on sentence.
Rose Parks a former civil rights leader was influence by the time period which she live.
Comma needed after Parks and after leader.
influenced
in which she lived.
Rosa Parks help million of people by the time period which she lived.
helped
in the time period
Those are the corrections for the first paragraph. Please read the rest of the essay aloud to catch your other mistakes. It will help if you let the essay sit over night before you do any more corrections.
Ok
My english teacher help me on the intro. She wrote these sentence for us and then she said we had to choose it (first 2 sentences) . The other two she help me.
Rosa Parks
A person's characteristics are shaped by the setting and beliefs of society during a specific time period affects on individuals actions and lifestyle. Rose Parks, a former civil rights leader, was influence by the time period which she live. Rosa Parks helped millions of people in the time period which she lived.
Rosa Parks wanted all people to be treated equally and justly and not be discriminated against. African American people were treated unfairly. The law states that black people and white people should remain separate. Before the civil rights movement, African American in the south couldn't go to the same schools as whites. They couldn't go to any parks or swimming pools as the whites. In the city buses of Montgomery the black people have to sit at the back of the bus and the whites sit in the front of the bus. But the blacks have to give up their seats if the white person wanted to sit down,
Rosa Parks wanted black people to be free and have a better education. Most blacks couldn't go to the same schools as whites, they went to segregated schools. Most blacks couldn't eat in most restaurants with the whites. Most of the time, they were insulted by whites and beat. The blacks couldn't get many jobs that whites held. In addition, they were not welcomed in most white churches.
Rosa Parks became a civil rights leader. Rosa Parks hates the segregation laws, and has been fighting for civil rights at the NAACP for more than 10 years, until breaking the law. On December 1, 1955 in the city buses of Montgomery, after Rosa Parks sit in the front of the bus where the white people seat. Rosa took a seat with a man who was next to the window. They were not disturbed until they reached the third stop after she boarded the bus. At this point a few white people boarded the bus, and one white man was left standing. When the driver noticed him standing, he told Rosa and the other black people (the man and two women across the aisle) to let the man have the seat. The other three all stood up the second time after he barked at them. When everyone moved except Rosa. The driver saw Rosa still sitting there after they moved. He said to give up her seat and she said, "No, I will not." Then he said that she has to arrest her, Rosa didn't care. Rosa was tired after a long day of work as a seamstress for a Montgomery, Alabama, department store and tired of the segregation laws. When the police came they send her to jail for breaking the law.
Is it good. Is there any mistakes????
Is my essay is good???
You rejected my previous suggestions, so I can't help you any more tonight on this essay.
I suspect you misunderstood your teacher. However, it's up to you to work this out with your teacher.
I didn't reject your post. I was reading it and made corrects!
Never Mind
But thank for nothing :(