Could you please check these last sentences? Thank you very much.

1) I'm quite long, straight, brown-haired.(Should there be a hyphen to separate adjectives?)
2) After homework I help my mum with the housework.
3) Can you say “at 13:45 o’clock”?
It’s a five-minute drive to school.
4) Can I have a standard one-way ticket to Liverpool, please?
5) How high is the fare to Liverpool?
6) How much is a weekly (bus) pass from London to Oxford?
7) A nosy person is someone who always (not ever???) asks personal questions.
8) I’m sometimes angry with the world. Can you say that in English?
Can you form past participles from the following parts of the body:
leg, arm, face, eye lash, eye lid and nose.

1) I have very long, straight, brown hair.

2) After homework, I help my mum with the housework.

3) Can you say “at 13:45 o’clock”?
No, you'd say "at 13:45" or "at 1345 hours" or "at quarter to two" or "at 1:45 pm."

It’s a five-minute drive to school. = OK

4, 5, and 6 = OK

7) A nosy person is someone who always asks personal questions.

8) I’m sometimes angry with the world. Can you say that in English? (yes!)

Can you form past participles from the following parts of the body:
leg, arm, face, eye lash, eye lid and nose. No.

Here's what you can say:

She's a blond, blue-eyed baby.
He's a tall, strong, boy.
She has a fair complexion and blue eyes.
She has long eyelashes.
He has a crooked nose.
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