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Obesity is one of the major causes of health problems in the United States. Research has been done about this topic for many years. It is more common in the United States because of all the different fast food restaurants. Often people do not take this health issue as serious as they should. Obesity can occur in the early stage of one’s life and get worse over time. Some people think that it is caused by just eating too much junk food, but it can also be lack of exercise, and many other factors as well. As adults, we should watch what our children eat and make sure that they partake in some type of exercise each day. Sitting in front of the television playing video games or just walking through the house is not considered exercising. Obesity can be cause by overeating, genes, and stress.
First, overeating is the major problem in obesity. People do not watch the different calories and protein that they intake on a daily basis. Each day the body requires a certain amount to food, according to the Food Pyramid developed by the US Department of Agriculture (USDA). A lot of time, we eat things just because it is in our present. One has to take control of his or her mind and tell it when enough is enough. Sometimes, it just seems like we cannot get full, but as older people sometimes say, “Your eyes are bigger than your belly.”
Also, obesity is not always caused by overeating, but it can be a hereditary issue. Most of the time if both parents are obese then the child or children will be obese as well. Reason being is that the parents have not formed a eating and lifestyle habit. Some families struggle day to day trying to find ways to prevent this problem among their child or children and themselves. Although, there is many ways to solve this problem which includes the following: eat healthy, exercising, diets, and spend less time being a couch potato.
Next, we tend to let stress overtake us. Many people do not know exactly how to handle stress. Of course there is good stress and bad stress. Bad stress is not good for the body because overtime you will find yourself gaining excess weight when you could have prevented it. Most people when they get frustrated or things seem to overwhelm them they tend to eat. However, this is not a good idea because you are not doing anything but causing different health problems to your body. Some of the problems could be high blood pressure, shortness of breath, diabetes, and arthritis.
Obesity is continuing growing day by day. However, we need to discipline ourselves so that we can lower the percentage of obesity among children and adults. There are so many things we can do to help make us healthier and less worried about whether we will be able to see tomorrow or not. This is a goal that he or she has to be willing to do. The key thing is to start by forming a group that will motivate him or her to lose weight. Overeating, genes, and stress has caused obesity for so many years,but we can take a stand and change it now.
"health issue as serious" = seriously (adverab)
"Obesity can be cause" = caused
"a certain amount to food," = of (not to)
"A lot of time" = times (plural)OR "a lot of the time"
"in our present." = presence
This is an incomplete sentence: "Reason being is that the parents have not formed a eating and lifestyle habit." = Y ou could fix it by beginning with : "A reason is..."
"among their child" = among their children (drop child)
"there is many ways" = there are many ways
\"is continuing growing" = either: "is continuing to grow" OR "continues growing"
"and stress has caused" = plural subject = have caused
If you make all the corrections and have time you could repost for final proofreading, but I will not be online.
Sra
Ok I made the changes and also added some info. If you would please check it for errors I would appreciate it.
Obesity is one of the major causes of health problems in the United States. Research has been done about this topic for many years. It is more common in the United States because of all the different fast food restaurants. According to the United States Center for Disease Control and Prevention in some 22 states were obese in 2006. In two of those states—Mississippi and West Virginia—one in nearly every three people were considered obese (Green 33).Often people do not take this health issue as seriously as they should. Obesity can occur in the early stage of one’s life and get worse over time. Some people think that it is caused by just eating too much junk food, but it can also be lack of exercise, and many other factors as well. As adults, we should watch what our children eat and make sure that they partake in some type of exercise each day. Sitting in front of the television playing video games or just walking through the house is not considered exercising. Obesity can be caused by overeating, genes, and stress.
First, overeating is the major problem in obesity. People do not watch the different calories and protein that they intake on a daily basis. Each day the body requires a certain amount of food, according to the Food Pyramid developed by the US Department of Agriculture (USDA). A lot of times, we eat things just because it is in our presence. One has to take control of his or her mind and tell it when enough is enough. Sometimes, it just seems like we cannot get full, but as older people sometimes say, “Your eyes are bigger than your belly.”
Also, obesity is not always caused by overeating, but it can be a hereditary issue. Most of the time if both parents are obese then the child or children will be obese as well. A reason is that the parents have not formed a eating and lifestyle habit. Some families struggle day to day trying to find ways to prevent this problem among their children and themselves. According to Jillian Michaels, just because your whole family is overweight does not mean that is your destiny. We all can change the expression of our genes by involving our physical environment as well as our cellular environment via diet and lifestyle choices (26).
Next, we tend to let stress overtake us. Many people do not know exactly how to handle stress. Often, stressed people lose sleep, exercise less, and drink more alcohol, all which can contribute to becoming obese (“Stress and Overeating” 6). Of course there is good stress and bad stress. Bad stress is not good for the body because overtime you will find yourself gaining excess weight when you could have prevented it. Some people when they get frustrated or things seem to overwhelm them they tend to eat. However, this is not a good idea because you are not doing anything but causing different health problems to occur in your body. Some of the problems could be high blood pressure, shortness of breath, diabetes, and arthritis.
Obesity is continuing to grow day by day. However, we need to discipline ourselves so that we can lower the percentage of obesity among children and adults. There are so many things we can do to help make us healthier and less worried about whether we will be able to see tomorrow or not. This is a goal that he or she has to be willing to do. The key thing is to start by forming a group that will motivate him or her to lose weight. Overeating, genes, and stress have caused obesity for so many years, but we can take a stand and change it now.
Obesity is one of the major causes of health problems in the United States, and your piece highlights some of the main factors contributing to this issue such as overeating, genetic predisposition, and stress. However, there are a few corrections and improvements that can be made to enhance the clarity and flow of your writing.
1. In the introductory paragraph, change "Research has been done about this topic for many years" to "Extensive research has been conducted on this topic for many years."
2. In the sentence "Often people do not take this health issue as serious as they should," change "serious" to "seriously."
3. In the sentence "Obesity can occur in the early stage of one’s life and get worse over time," change "stage" to "stages" to better reflect the ongoing nature of obesity.
4. In the sentence "Some people think that it is caused by just eating too much junk food..." change "by just eating" to "solely by consuming" for clarity.
5. In the sentence "Sitting in front of the television playing video games or just walking through the house is not considered exercising," change "is not considered" to "do not constitute" to strengthen the statement.
6. In the second paragraph, change "cause" to "caused" to maintain the verb tense consistency.
7. In the paragraph discussing stress, change "Most people when they get frustrated or things seem to overwhelm them they tend to eat" to "Many people tend to eat when they become frustrated or overwhelmed."
8. In the sentence "Some of the problems could be high blood pressure, shortness of breath, diabetes, and arthritis," add a comma before "and arthritis" for clarity.
9. In the final paragraph, change "he or she" to "we" so that it aligns with the inclusive tone of the rest of the text.
10. In the sentence "Overeating, genes, and stress has caused obesity for so many years,but we can take a stand and change it now," change "has" to "have" to match the plural subject "Overeating, genes, and stress."
Overall, your piece tackles the complex issue of obesity and its causes. Making these changes will enhance the readability and coherence of your writing. Keep up the good work!