Could someone pleasr proofread this for me one last time?
Even though people feel as if their past debt management mistakes should not count against them, credit scores are a fair measure to help lenders estimate potential risk because a credit score can be improved, and it is based on one’s credit history. A credit score is the greatest factor that lenders consider while making their decision. A credit score can determine if a borrower will be approved for a loan, the amount of interest that would be charged, and the credit limit on the loan ("Your Credit Score," n.d.).
One argument that many have about lenders using a credit score to determine a risk factor is that they do not fully understand what a credit score is. A credit score is a numerical rating that may range from 300-850 ("Credit Score," 2004-2011); it is based on information within a credit file. This number helps lenders predict how likely it is that you will make your payments in full and on time. The higher a credit score is, the better chances of obtaining approval for a loan with lower interest rates. Credit scores have sped up the process of a loan approval process. With three different credit reporting agencies Experian, Equifax, and TransUnion people feel that a credit score is not a fair report for a lender to use because there may be a small difference in the points depending on the agency that the report was pulled from. All three agencies use the same calculator system to figure out a score; it is called the Fair Isaac Corporation (FICO). Even though they may all use the FICO system, a score may differ in points from each agency, as a result of incorrect or inadequate information ("Credit Score," 2004-2011). That is why it is very important to at least once a year request a copy of a credit report. Every person is allowed one free credit report a year, from all three agencies.
Many people argue that a low score should not count against them when they are trying to apply for a loan or any line of credit. Knowledge of the five steps ("Credit Score," 2004-2011) used in reporting on a credit report can help to improve a score and ensure them a better chance of an approval. The five steps are payment history, outstanding debt, length of credit, different types of credit, and credit inquiries. Payment history accounts for 35% of a credit score, it consists of bills paid on time and any collections on accounts. Payment history is also where a lender can see the amounts due on past delinquent accounts, and the number of accounts paid as agreed. Outstanding debt accounts for 30% of the credit score; it is the amount of money still owed on loans or cards, and any source of credit that you have. Length of credit accounts for 15% of a score, the older the accounts, the better and the time since there was any activity on the accounts. Lenders do not like to see many new accounts. Different types of credit accounts for 10% of a credit score, the different kinds of credit are credit cards, charge cards, store cards, personal loans, line of credit loans, mortgages, and payday loans. Lenders like to see different types on a credit report not just credit cards. Finally credit inquiries account for 10% of a credit score, it shows how much time since you applied for any credit and if there are too many inquiries it will lower your score and lenders look at it as if you are just looking for money. Also this part of the credit report shows how many new accounts have been opened. A credit report starts with the first credit account ever opened. A credit score must calculate all of the factors mentioned, it cannot just use selected information. A credit score is based completely off one’s debt management skills.
Many people do not know that a credit score also makes credit decisions fairer because lenders cannot use or rely on their personal feelings of a borrower. With many factors that do not count against a person in his or her credit report, a credit score does not discriminate against a person because of his or her age, sex, race, religion, nationality, or marital status. A person’s employment history, salary, occupation, or job title does not have anything to do with calculating a credit score. However, a lender may consider this information if it is provided. Also a credit report cannot report if a person has or ever had any form of public assistance.
Another argument that arises often is that there is no way to improve a score and that a person will always have a bad score. A credit score is not concrete; there are many steps that can be taken to improve a credit score. You can start ("Board of Governors of the Federal Reserve System," n.d.) by checking your credit report for any errors, and if there are any, dispute them. Make larger payments on credit cards. By making larger payments you are paying down the amount due faster. Stop using credit cards for a while; this will allow you to pay the debt down. Make all of your monthly payments in full and on time, with every payment made it will reflect positively on your score. Be sure to address any collections head on. Finally create a credit monitoring plan. Once you have taken the steps to improve your credit score you should keep a close eye on it. Bad credit scoring does not haunt a person forever ("Credit Score," 2004-2011).
Credit scores are a fair measure to help lenders estimate potential risk because a consumer builds his or her own credit score. A score is based off of their own choices and credit monitoring skills. A person with a low credit score as a result of not making payments in full or on time, outstanding debt, and an outrageous debt to income ratio, should not be approved for a loan or any line of credit.
calculator system OR calculating system?
I'd add a few more commas here and there but that's a small point.
I'd still use a semicolon here OR drop the word "it" and you can get away with the comma, merely listing things: "35% of a credit score, it consists of bills paid on time"
I'm still seeing the SAME run-on sentences as before. Did you just overlook, ignore, or not believe my corrections? "35% of a credit score, it consists of bills paid on time" = score; it consists OR leave the comma and try score, consisting of bills, etc.
Here's another one: "10% of a credit score, the different kinds of credit " = score; the different OR leave the comma and try...score, the different kinds of credit being....(then list them)
and yet another: "10% of a credit score, it shows how much time" = score; it shows OR score, showing how much time
Get the idea? I can't tell you how I feel I'm wasting my time when I see the same errors that I have already pointed out and corrected! (Trust me, I have no time to waste!)
"mentioned, it cannot " = mentioned; it cannot OR mentioned, not being able to...
"A score is based off of their own choices: = I still think "based on their" is better.
Now you are on your own. Make all those corrections and you have an outstanding paper.
Sra
Sure, I can proofread the passage for you. However, as an AI, I'm not able to directly edit your text. I will provide some suggestions for improvement and point out any errors I notice.
Here are some suggestions for improving the passage:
1. Revise the sentence "Even though people feel as if their past debt management mistakes should not count against them..." to make it clearer. Consider rephrasing it to something like: "While some individuals may believe that their past debt management mistakes should not have an impact on their credit scores..."
2. In the sentence "One argument that many have about lenders using a credit score to determine a risk factor is that they do not fully understand what a credit score is," consider providing more context or examples to support this argument. It would strengthen your point.
3. In the paragraph discussing the five steps used in reporting credit, consider breaking it up into several paragraphs for better readability. Each step could have its own paragraph, making it easier for the reader to follow.
4. In the sentence "Many people argue that a low score should not count against them when they are trying to apply for a loan or any line of credit," provide more context or evidence to support this argument. Consider including some counterarguments as well to present a balanced perspective.
5. In the sentence "A credit score must calculate all of the factors mentioned, it cannot just use selected information," consider adding a transition word at the beginning or rephrasing it for clarity. For example, you could revise it to: "When calculating a credit score, it is essential to consider all of the factors mentioned, rather than just selecting specific information."
6. In the paragraph discussing how a credit score does not discriminate against a person based on various factors, consider providing examples or statistics to support this claim. This would add credibility to your argument.
7. In the sentence "Another argument that arises often is that there is no way to improve a score and that a person will always have a bad score," consider providing evidence to counter this argument. You have already mentioned steps for improving credit scores, so you can explain how these steps can effectively raise a person's score.
8. In the last paragraph, consider restructuring the sentence "Credit scores are a fair measure to help lenders estimate potential risk because a consumer builds his or her own credit score." It would be clearer to explicitly state how consumers build their credit scores. For example, you could revise it to: "Credit scores are a fair measure to help lenders estimate potential risk because they are calculated based on a consumer's credit history and financial choices."
Overall, the passage contains a lot of good information but could benefit from clearer organization and more supporting evidence for the arguments presented. Remember to revise and proofread your work thoroughly to ensure clarity and correctness.