his is being graded along with this poem (I KNOW IT'S LONG BUT DON'T BE SCARED TO READ IT. I NEED THE COMMENTS):
When nothing else remains, I want to know if you’ll stand by my side. If you’ll be the light of my path when the sun shuts down. I want to know if you’ll mend my soul and patch up my bleeding heart; even if it’s beyond all repair.
When nothing else remains, the clouds cease and the world becomes barren, I want to know if you’ll mouth my name, and tell me everything’s alright.
Give me a sign. We should be able to fly. I want to know if we can touch the sky. I want to know if I can be with you, dream with you… without having to talk to you.
When nothing else remains, buildings tumble and fall, as smoke fills the air our love should conquer all.
Give me a sign that will show me if you care. All the pain and subtle ecstasy, I want to know if you’ll be able to bare.
Give me a sign and let our eyes do the talking. I wan to know if you’ll hold me strong in your arms. You can sustain our love.
When nothing else remains, I want to know if you’ll be my Romeo; holding hands hallucinating. Together we dream of a teeming world where only love survives.
Give me a sign that shows me you care. Our love is like a song. I want to know if our melody will play on and on.
When nothing else remains, it shouldn’t matter if you’re scared. That’s how close we should be. Together we’ll travel to the end of the sea … all I want is us.
constructive criticism plz
You have not said if this is your original poem or are you paraphrasing someone else's poem?
Sra
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Your poem seems to revolve around the theme of love and the desire for a deep and lasting connection with someone. The speaker expresses a longing for a partner who will stand by their side, be a source of light in difficult times, and mend their soul and heart, even if it seems impossible. The speaker also hopes for a sign of love and reassurance, wanting to know if their partner cares deeply for them and is willing to endure both pain and joy. There is a desire to communicate and connect without words, through actions and eye contact.
The poem also mentions the idea of love overcoming adversity and the belief that love can conquer all, even in the face of falling buildings and a barren world. The reference to Romeo and Juliet suggests a yearning for a passionate and intense love, where the couple dreams of a world where love is the only thing that survives.
Overall, the poem explores themes of love, connection, reassurance, and the power of love to overcome challenges. It conveys a sense of longing and a desire for a deep and lasting romantic relationship.
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