I am writing this essay about Shirley Jackson's "The lottery"

My essay is supposed to be about
i think i want to talk about stoning in south africa( how long it lasted, if it still takes place, was it for punishment or for no reason) and the second body paragraph about why i think she said it conclusion i want to add her statement -->: “If your only reason for doing something is that you've always done it, might not be a reason at all.”- Shirley Jackson

I made two different starting paragraphs could you please help me figure out which one would fit perfectly. My last line is the Thesis.

First Intro and Thesis.

>>The Lottery published in 1948 by author Shirley was actually banned by South Africa that same exact year. While no one is quite sure why it was banned Jackson did have to say in response “Well at least the understand it”. The reason behind the delinquent activity, I believe is so that the village would have plenty of luck with the growth of they’re crops. I think Jackson meant when she said “Well at least they understand it” is because stoning has been a form of punishment in South Africa for hundreds of years. I also think many South Africans felt the story was anti-apartheid. <<

Second Into-Thesis.>>
Questions plague the mind of many readers of why exactly was Shirley Jackson was stoned. This gruesome tale tells of a innocent woman stoned in the villages of Africa with an intention to grow crops. ..No one can relate to her story but when South Africa banned her story, her only reply was "well at least they understand it". He vague statement opens a realm of in depth analysis on what basis was this torture was done to her and it banning of the document justified this or made them realise their mistake.<<

Questions plague the mind of many readers of why exactly Tessie Hutchinson was stoned in Shirley Jackson's, "The Lottery." This gruesome tale tells of an innocent woman stoned in a small village of 300 people. In doing so, the community thought that their motives would aid them in their intentions to grow crops successfully. No one can relate to Jackson's story, but when South Africa banned her story, her only reply was "well at least they understand it." Mrs. Jackson's vague statement opens a realm of in-depth analysis on what basis this torture was done and if banning of the document justified this or made them realize their mistake.

The sacrificial stoning of Tessie Hutchinson on the 27th day in June was carried out heedlessly. Keeping the tradition alive are two of the eldest men of the entire village, Old man Warner and Mr. Summers. Countless amounts of villagers reactions on being reminded of the reason of the ritual, I believe are significantly coward like. The other villagers who did not appear to be bothered by the stoning of Tessie display actions are comparable to zombies, demonic, and brainwashed.
Normally, a loved one being put to death would make one utterly emotional but the Hutchinson family all showed no anguish. Nancy and Bill Jr. both being Tessie’s older children and the two create the impression that they are truly peppy neither of them have the black dot. “Nancy and Bill Jr. opened theirs at the same time, and both beamed and laughed, turning around to the crowd and holding their slips of paper above their heads”. The joining of the village (including her family) to stone Mrs. Hutchinson was done more out of tradition and rituals than out of actual delinquency. The small village of people seem to believe that every year one person is sacrificed for healthy growth of crops. “Lottery in June, corn be heavy soon” quoted old man Warner.

Now, the fiction story of the lottery was in no way directed towards any one country, state, person, etc. directly. Soon after the release of “The Lottery” tons of hate mail was sent to The New Yorker (a popular magazine company), and “hundreds of readers canceled their subscriptions“. “Even Jackson’s parents wrote her a letter disapproving of her story”. Of all the upsetting feedback Shirley was receiving from her story, the most drastic measure took to ensure the entries obliteration was when South Africa banned her story completely (which made Mrs. Jackson proud). I would have been hurt but, Jackson’s response was “well at least they understand it”. I think she meant when she said “Well at least they understand it” that South Africa has perceived as having many of the cruelest practices known to man.
And although there is no accrediting resource that proceeds me to assume whether or not stoning was taking place in 1948, there is evidence that “voters of South Africa are allowing a government policy, too continue, which drastically limits the freedom of millions of black inhabitants”. A tradition South Africa has yet to cease. But if the very people of South Africa are the same people keeping this belittling tradition around who’s not to say they stopped stoning people? I would not be surprised if I did hear that South Africa stones the “black inhabitants” they confine.
A gruesome fiction story entitled “The Lottery” by Shirley Jackson was published in 1948. In this same year South Africa banned it. Jackson’s only reply was "well at least they understand it” she also stated “If your only reason for doing something is that you've always done it, might not be a reason at all”.The sacrificial stoning of Tessie Hutchinson on the 27th day in June was carried out heedlessly. Keeping the tradition alive are two of the eldest men of the entire village, Old man Warner and Mr. Summers. Countless amounts of villagers reactions on being reminded of the reason of the ritual, I believe are significantly coward like. The other villagers who did not appear to be bothered by the stoning of Tessie display actions are comparable to zombies, demonic, and brainwashed.
Normally, a loved one being put to death would make one utterly emotional but the Hutchinson family all showed no anguish. Nancy and Bill Jr. both being Tessie’s older children and the two create the impression that they are truly peppy neither of them have the black dot. “Nancy and Bill Jr. opened theirs at the same time, and both beamed and laughed, turning around to the crowd and holding their slips of paper above their heads”. The joining of the village (including her family) to stone Mrs. Hutchinson was done more out of tradition and rituals than out of actual delinquency. The small village of people seem to believe that every year one person is sacrificed for healthy growth of crops. “Lottery in June, corn be heavy soon” quoted old man Warner.

Now, the fiction story of the lottery was in no way directed towards any one country, state, person, etc. directly. Soon after the release of “The Lottery” tons of hate mail was sent to The New Yorker (a popular magazine company), and “hundreds of readers canceled their subscriptions“. “Even Jackson’s parents wrote her a letter disapproving of her story”. Of all the upsetting feedback Shirley was receiving from her story, the most drastic measure took to ensure the entries obliteration was when South Africa banned her story completely (which made Mrs. Jackson proud). I would have been hurt but, Jackson’s response was “well at least they understand it”. I think she meant when she said “Well at least they understand it” that South Africa has perceived as having many of the cruelest practices known to man.
And although there is no accrediting resource that proceeds me to assume whether or not stoning was taking place in 1948, there is evidence that “voters of South Africa are allowing a government policy, too continue, which drastically limits the freedom of millions of black inhabitants”. A tradition South Africa has yet to cease. But if the very people of South Africa are the same people keeping this belittling tradition around who’s not to say they stopped stoning people? I would not be surprised if I did hear that South Africa stones the “black inhabitants” they confine.
A gruesome fiction story entitled “The Lottery” by Shirley Jackson was published in 1948. In this same year South Africa banned it. Jackson’s only reply was "well at least they understand it” she also stated “If your only reason for doing something is that you've always done it, might not be a reason at all”.

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First Intro and Thesis:

The first introduction seems to be more appropriate in terms of providing context and setting up the main points of your essay. It introduces the fact that Shirley Jackson's "The Lottery" was banned in South Africa and raises questions about the reasons behind the ban. It also connects this banning with the idea of stoning as a form of punishment in South Africa and suggests a possible connection between the story and anti-apartheid sentiments. The thesis statement, however, seems to be missing from this introduction. Make sure to clearly state your main argument or point of view in your thesis statement.

Second Intro-Thesis:

The second introduction, while it opens with a provocative question, seems to focus more on the author herself being stoned rather than addressing the themes and implications of "The Lottery" in relation to South Africa. It also doesn't provide a clear thesis statement or outline the main points or arguments you intend to make in your essay.

Therefore, the first introduction is more suitable for your essay, but don't forget to include a clear thesis statement that reflects your main argument or point of view on the subject matter.