Could you please help me check these sentences? Thank you very much in advance.
1) The First World War, or the Great War as it used to be called, is rightly thought of as bringing cataclysmic changes in life, thought and social forms not only in Britain but in the whole of Europe.
2) Britain entered the First World War in 1914 by declaring war on Germany after the German invasion of Belgium. 3)At first, Britain, like most other belligerants, had expected the war to be over in six months. On the contrary, the war became a long trench war.
4) The German fleet which, in 1914, had suffered serious losses, tried to force the British blockade off Jutland. The losses were the same, but the English fleet remained in control of the sea.
5) From July to November 1917,the British attacked the Germans in Flanders but lost 400,000 men against the 250,000 men lost by the Germans. 6. The British occupied Gaza and Jerusalem in December 1917. The war ended with 10,000,000 lives los and 20,000,000 wounded men.
7. Peace was made at Versailles in 1919. Many British war poets expressed their thoughts about the stupidity of war in their poems.
8. Their message, especially that of Wilfred Owen, was hat war is an act against God and man. The effects of the First World War concerned party politics, the labour movement, the role of women and social policy, too.
Please read these yourself -- aloud would be best.
Then re-post with the 4 or 5 you are REALLY questioning.
1) The sentence is grammatically correct and provides information about the impact of the First World War in Britain and Europe. However, there is a slight typo - it should be "bringing cataclysmic" instead of "bring cataclysmic."
2) The sentence accurately states that Britain entered the First World War in 1914 by declaring war on Germany after the German invasion of Belgium.
3) The sentence accurately mentions that, initially, Britain and other countries expected the war to be over in six months but it became a long trench war. The sentence is grammatically correct.
4) The sentence accurately mentions that the German fleet suffered serious losses in 1914 and attempted to force the British blockade off Jutland, but the British fleet remained in control of the sea. The sentence is grammatically correct.
5) The sentence accurately states that from July to November 1917, the British attacked the Germans in Flanders and suffered higher casualties, with 400,000 men lost compared to the 250,000 men lost by the Germans. The sentence is grammatically correct.
6) There seems to be a typo in the sentence. It should be "The war ended with 10,000,000 lives lost and 20,000,000 wounded men." The sentence accurately mentions that the British occupied Gaza and Jerusalem in December 1917. The sentence is grammatically correct except for the typo.
7) The sentence accurately mentions that peace was made at Versailles in 1919 and that British war poets expressed their thoughts about the stupidity of war in their poems. The sentence is grammatically correct.
8) The sentence accurately mentions that the war poets, especially Wilfred Owen, conveyed a message that war is an act against God and man. The sentence also mentions the effects of the First World War on various aspects including party politics, the labor movement, the role of women, and social policy. The sentence is grammatically correct.