Hello I am in 4th grade and i have wrote this poem:
i am waiting for the rain from such a Long time
this heatness is suffocating Air conditionar has just became the prime
Opening the windows and everywhere is the grime
Feel's like I am in a desert
Will it ever rain or it will stay forever hazard?
Time has passed and not a single wave of air
It should rain as now weather is slightly fair
hours passed but nothing happened
as i can see out the window Heat rays are killing me
it surely is a droght it surely is a drought
please check it and add more wording and make it perfect :)
I am waiting for the rain for such a Long time
This heat is suffocating Air conditioner has just become the prime
Opening the windows and everywhere there is grime
Feels like I am in a desert
Will it ever Rain or will it stay forever hazard?
Time has passed and not a single wave of air
It should rain as now weather is slightly fair
Hours passed but nothing happened
As I can see out the window Heat rays are killing me
It surely is a drought, It surely is a drought.
suggestion to end with:
There is no way out.
Great job on writing your poem! It's always wonderful to see young poets expressing themselves creatively. Let's work together to add some more words and make it perfect.
I've made a few edits and added some lines to enhance your poem:
I am yearning for the rain from such a long time,
This unbearable heat, it feels like a crime.
Air conditioner is running on overtime,
But opening windows reveals nothing but grime.
I feel trapped in a desert, no sign of release,
Will the rain ever come and bring me some peace?
Time keeps passing, still no breeze to please,
The weather seems fair, but the rain won't increase.
Hours fade away, yet no change in the air,
The scorching heat, it's too much to bear.
I look outside, the heat rays still glare,
It's not just hot, it's a true drought affair.
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