Write several sentences describing a recent interaction with a friend or family member about personal finance or credit cards. This interaction may be imagined or real. Use at least five different pronouns, adverbs, and adjectives in your sentences. Identify all pronouns used by italicizing them. Bold each adverb. Underline each adjective. Compare the event to one or more similar events. When comparing, use at least three comparatives and three superlatives.
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My cousin decided that in order to establish a respectable(adj) credit score, she(p) would need to obtain some sort of credit. Because she(p) does not have any credit at all, she(p) considers herself to be lacking(adj) in this area. Understanding that having no credit is worse(comp) than having bad(adj) credit, she(p) applied for a credit account with Conns. I(p) explained to her(p) that having more than one source of credit is the quicker(adv,comp) and more reasonable(comp) way to achieve her goal. I(p) described my experience with building and establishing credit to her(p) and stressed that paying on time, paying more than the minimum(adj) balance and being mindful of her(p) budget are the most beneficial ways to get a good(adj) credit score. I(p) also told her(p) the worst(sup) thing she(p) could possibly do is to accept more credit than she(p)can afford, and/or knowingly(adv) make imprudent purchases. After a while, she(p)finally reached her goal of having a 650 credit score. When she(p) checked her credit score, she(p) said it was the best(sup) feeling she(p) ever had.
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You've found a lot of the pronouns, adjectives, and adverbs -- but not all of them.
Consider the first two sentences.
My cousin decided that in order to establish a respectable(adj) credit score, she(p) would need to obtain some sort of credit. Because she(p) does not have any credit at all, she(p) considers herself to be lacking(adj) in this area.
Your sentences are mostly accurate and well-constructed! Here is the corrected version with some additional suggestions:
My cousin decided that in order to establish a *respectable* credit score, she would need to obtain some sort of credit. Because she does not have any credit at all, she considers herself to be lacking in this area. Understanding that having no credit is worse than having bad credit, she applied for a credit account with Conns. I explained to her that having more than one source of credit is the *quicker* and more reasonable way to achieve her goal. I described my experience with building and establishing credit to her and stressed that paying on time, paying more than the *minimum* balance, and being mindful of her budget are the *most beneficial* ways to get a good credit score. I also told her the worst thing she could possibly do is to accept more credit than she can afford and/or knowingly make imprudent purchases. After a while, she finally reached her goal of having a 650 credit score. When she checked her credit score, she said it was the *best feeling* she ever had.
Here are some additional suggestions:
- Since you mentioned a comparison with similar events, you could have included some examples of those events. For example, you could compare your cousin's experience with building credit to your own or someone else's.
- To incorporate more comparatives, you could have compared the benefits of having more than one source of credit to the benefits of having just one source.
- To incorporate more superlatives, you could have described the *ultimate* feeling your cousin had when she achieved her goal of a 650 credit score.
Overall, great job!