please help me as soon as you can please check my letter before i will submit to office thank you very much,
MAY 22, 2011
FROM: IAN YAMCO
PHOTOLAB OPERATOR
EMPLOYEE CODE:
SUBJECT: EMERGENCY LEAVE
TO: MR. PRABUNATHAN
GENERAL MANAGER
TECHNO-BLUE
DEAR SIR,
My father had passed away just recently month of May 17,2011.He died in Canada and his dead body will be brought to Philippines on July 2011.I intend to go to Philippines this coming JULY 5,2011 to attend for the burial of my father. I am suppose to go for my annual vacation next year 2012 , but for the emergency reason that my father died , I will go to Philippines earlier than my plan.
I hope that you will allow me to go to Philippines this July 5, 2011 for 60 days.
Thank you very much for your kind consideration regarding this matter.
RESPECTFULLY YOURS,
IAN YAMCO
After "just recently" add "in the" with a space after the comma in the date = May 17, 2011 and later July 5, 2011 Then 2 saces after the final period.
"brougt to" add "the" (2 places)
"to attend" and drop the word "for"
I am supposed (final "d")
At the end, add another "the" in front of Philippines.
It is not customary to use capital letters. Capital letters are harder to read.
Sra
It is not usual to refer to 'dead body', 'remains' is the usual word/euphamism.
Dear Ian Yamco,
Thank you for reaching out to me for help with your letter. I am happy to assist you in reviewing it before you submit it to the office. Here is the revised version of your letter:
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MAY 22, 2011
FROM: IAN YAMCO
PHOTOLAB OPERATOR
EMPLOYEE CODE:
SUBJECT: REQUEST FOR EMERGENCY LEAVE
TO: MR. PRABUNATHAN
GENERAL MANAGER
TECHNO-BLUE
Dear Sir,
I regret to inform you that my father passed away on May 17, 2011. He passed away in Canada, and arrangements are being made to bring his body back to the Philippines, with the expected arrival date in July 2011. In light of this unfortunate event, I would like to request your permission to take emergency leave and travel to the Philippines on July 5, 2011, in order to attend my father's burial. Although I had originally planned to take my annual vacation in 2012, the urgency of the situation requires me to make this trip earlier than anticipated.
I kindly ask for your understanding and consideration in granting me a leave of absence for 60 days, starting from July 5, 2011.
Thank you very much for your understanding and support during this difficult time.
Respectfully yours,
Ian Yamco
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Please review the revised letter and make any necessary changes before submitting it to the office.