Can you check if my explanation is weak, moderate or strong? Tell me why is it weak, moderate or strong. If it's weak, what can I do to improve my explanation?

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Point 2:
In addition, the Nurse intimidates the patients to show how powerful she is and that she is like a “machine”.

Proof 2:
The Nurse learns to “smell out” the fear of her patients and “put it to use”.
The repeated use of the adjective “big” in reference to the Nurse reflects Broom’s fearful perception of her power rather than her actual size [considering] Broom himself is six feet eight inches, but he feels that his experience has physically shrunk him.
Whenever the Nurse seems in indisputable control, the fog machine churns out its mist, scary, safe, and scary again.

Explanation 2:
The Nurse influences the patients to fear her, especially Broom, so the probability of rebelling against her is little. She is bigger than Broom in terms of power. Whenever Broom fears the Nurse, he hides in the fog.

Are the words in quotation marks actually quoted from the book? (One Flew over the Cuckoo's Nest, right?)

Are you actually including three separate items in Proof 2? Or do you need to phrase them so they read as three consecutive sentences?

I have no scale by which to rate this as weak, moderate, or strong, but I think you've done a good job in this sequence of ideas. You've made a point and focused on good proof and explanation.

I still wonder about all those words in quotation marks, though!

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No they're not quoted from the book.

I'm including three proofs to make my point "solid".
I don't know about my explanation still, I think it's weak or am I just overthinking on how to comment?

You should delete all those quotation marks if they're not actually quoting something. The word big, however, should be put in italics since you are referring to it as a word.

If you want to make your explanation stronger, you could add something about how Broom's reaction to her is indicative of how the other patients react -- retreating into their comfortable patterns of behavior that allows them to not be affected by her power. (RPM, however, might be the exception!)

Based on the provided explanation, I would classify it as moderate. Here's why:

Strengths:
- The explanation clearly states that the Nurse intimidates the patients to showcase her power and compares her to a machine.
- It provides evidence from the text to support this claim, such as the Nurse learning to use the patients' fear for her advantage and the repeated use of the adjective "big" to reflect Broom's perception of her power.
- The explanation mentions the connection between Broom's fear and the fog, indicating that he seeks safety in it.

Weaknesses:
- The explanation lacks clarity and cohesiveness. It jumps from one point to another without proper transitions or linking ideas. Consider restructuring the sentences to improve the flow of the explanation.
- The explanation could benefit from providing more specific examples or details from the text to support the statements made. This would make the argument stronger and more convincing.
- It would be helpful to explain why the Nurse's power intimidates the patients and why it makes them less likely to rebel against her.

Improvement Suggestions:
To strengthen your explanation, consider the following suggestions:
1. Start with a clear topic sentence that summarizes the main idea of the explanation.
2. Use specific evidence from the text to support each point you make. Include direct quotes or paraphrases that highlight the Nurse's intimidating behavior or actions.
3. Clearly explain the effects of the Nurse's intimidation on the patients. Why does it make them less likely to rebel? What are the consequences of their fear?
4. Make sure your explanation has a logical flow and connects the different points you make. Use linking words or phrases to unify your ideas.
5. Revise and edit your explanation for clarity and conciseness. Ensure that each sentence contributes to the overall strength of the explanation.