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Describe the world you come from- for example, your family, community or school -- and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations

Being the first in my family to attend college is not so easy. There has never been anyone at home to help or to guide me. I did not always receive the support I needed, there was and are people, that doubted me. My mother places a tremendous amount of pressure to go to college while my father doubts I can go to college. Yet, both of them have inspired my dreams and goals and shape the person I am.
Ever since I can remember my father has never given me his support because he has always viewed me as unintelligent. When I was little, he never wanted to take me to school, he always thought school was a waste of time, especially for a little girl. That is why, when I was younger. I did not care for school, I thought he was right. As a child I never received support from my family. My mother, a poor immigrant from Guatemala, was afraid of her abusive husband and would always agree with what he said. None of my teachers believed in me either, and all of them gave up except one, my fifth grade teacher. She was the first person who gave me all her support and that made me try. Thanks to her, I did not let my father bring me down. Instead he gave me strength to keep on trying to prove how smart I am. In middle school, I obtained good grades. When it was time to go to high school I wanted a challenging curriculum, therefore I wanted to go to a magnet school. When I told my father, he suggested that I should stay in the school I was because I would never get accepted in a magnet school. That did not stop me, I went to find out and I was accepted into Van Nuys High School Math and Science Magnet. In 10th grade, I enrolled into Honors classes; I was going to enroll into AP classes but my family, and my friends, thought I would fail, so I did not take any. I was going to prove to them that I could easily pass my Honors classes. I decided that in 11th grade, no matter what anyone told me, I would take AP Classes. This decision was made thanks to the support my English teacher. Taking AP English Language and composition was a challenge because writing has always been difficult. I find grammar and spelling often to be confusing. That class helped me become a better writer and a lot more confident. That confidence led me to take sociology and child development at Pierce college.
My family and community have shaped what I want to be and the person I am today. I realized I wanted to be a psychologist after taking child development and psychology. I took those classes to understand my father better and not judge him. Because the difficulties I went through I am now a stronger person, a person that does not give up. I stopped doubting myself, and started working hard because I have dreams and goals for the future that I am determined to make them happen.

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  2. Being the first in my family to attend college is not so easy. There has never been anyone at home to help or to guide me. I did not always receive the support I needed since there have been family members who have doubted me. My mother places a tremendous amount of pressure to go to college<~~add comma while my father doubts I can successfully do so. Yet,<~~delete comma both of them have inspired my dreams and goals and have shaped the person I am.

    Ever since I can remember<~~add comma my father has never given me his support because he has always viewed me as unintelligent. When I was little, he never wanted to take me to school,<~~run-on he always thought school was a waste of time, especially for a little girl. That is why, when I was younger. I did not care for school, I thought he was right. As a child I never received support from my family. My mother, a poor immigrant from Guatemala, was afraid of her abusive husband and always agreed with what he said. None of my teachers believed in me either, and all of them gave up except one, my fifth grade teacher. She was the first person who gave me all her support<~~add comma and that made me try. Thanks to her, I did not let my father bring me down. Instead he<~~father? teacher? gave me strength to keep on trying to prove how smart I am. In middle school, I obtained good grades. When it was time to go to high school<~~add comma I wanted a challenging curriculum,<~~run-on therefore I wanted to go to a magnet school. When I told my father, he suggested that I should stay where I was because I would never get accepted in a magnet school. That did not stop me,<~~run-on I went to find out<~~add comma and I was accepted into Van Nuys High School Math and Science Magnet. In 10th grade, I enrolled into<~~"in" not "into" Honors classes; I was going to enroll into<~~?? AP classes<~~add comma but my family, and my friends,<~~delete commas around that phrase thought I would fail, so I did not take any. I was going to prove to them that I could easily pass my Honors classes. I decided that in 11th grade, no matter what anyone told me, I would take AP Classes<~~lower case "c" needed. I made this decision thanks to the support my English teacher. Taking AP English Language and composition<~~capital C needed was a challenge because writing has always been difficult. I find grammar and spelling often to be confusing. That class helped me become a better writer and a lot more confident. That confidence led me to take sociology and child development at Pierce college.

    My family and community have shaped what I want to be and the person I am today. I realized I wanted to be a psychologist after taking child development and psychology. I took those classes to understand my father better and not judge him. Because of the difficulties I went through<~~add comma I am now a stronger person, a person that does not give up. I stopped doubting myself,<~~delete comma and started working hard because I have dreams and goals for the future that I am determined to make them<~~delete "them" happen.

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  3. Is public civility gone?

    I agree with the claim that there has been a loss of public civility in today's society. This is due to the fact that many people cannot control their own emotional behavior, People are trying to be different and break with the past, and one way in which they do that is by no longer conforming to what is considered "acceptable" behavior and many people now seem to be ignorant to the fact that they are rude and what constitutes polite behavior.

    Most people cannot control their own emotional behaviors. In the cases from the video, the people who were being rude were also very emotional. In general, the angrier or more upset people get, the more likely they are to act without thinking. The specific actions that are considered polite or rude vary dramatically by place, time and context. Differences in social role, gender, social class, religion and cultural identity all affect the appropriateness of a given behavior. Consequently, a behavior that is considered perfectly acceptable by one group of people may be considered clearly rude by another.

    People are trying to be different and break with the past, and one way in which they do that is by no longer conforming to what is considered "acceptable" behavior. Being rude grabs the viewer’s attention, as we saw in the cases of Serena Williams, Kanye West, and Joe Wilson. They all demonstrated a lack of manners which seemed to be more prevalent in the past. There were basic guidelines that you were taught from a very early age about how to be polite. You simply did not disrespect your elders or anybody else. Yes, you have to release anger, but there are appropriate ways and times to do it.
    In some cases, it is mere ignorance and people genuinely do not know how to behave in a polite manner or are unaware of how their actions are seen by others. And, of course, rudeness can be a rather relative thing. For example, phone related behavior that strikes many adults as rude is actually perfectly acceptable to most of the younger people. Many teenagers regard their phone as having top priority and see this as perfectly fine. So, when a student whips out her cell phone to answer a text while the teacher is explaining her paper grade to the student, she probably sees it as socially acceptable behavior. It also helps explain the student’s low paper grade, as spending the class time texting tends to have that result.

    There is considerable evidence that public discourse is becoming less civil in public. This is due to the facts that people jump to anger very quickly and do not think about what they are doing. By acting politely we are acknowledging that worth in ourselves and others and thus doing the right thing. By being rude, we lower our own worth by trying to lower that of others. As Americans we should all get together and bring back the public civility.

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