Hello!
I have written an article about childhood's best friend.
I'd be glad if someone can help me to correct my mistake or others.
thank you
Hello!
I'm franch and I'm studying english.
I have written an article about chilhood's best friend.
I'd be glad if someone can help me to correct my mistake.
Thank you
Childhood's twins
As a child hadn't you had a favourite friend? Who was your partner whatever you did. Certainly the only one you confessed your dreams. Most of us remembered their best times with this particular person.
During my first day at school I met her. Already when I had arrived I noticed her. Actually she looked the same as me. She smiled all her teeth and from her brown eyes. Her blonde hair was made into a ponytail with a straight fringe. She also wore dress and shoes similar to mine. My mother confessed me one day she had thought it had been my clone.
Quickly we became closed. After school if I wasn't at her home she was at mine. Moreover we never got bored. The most exciting was during holiday when parent let us invited each other for a whole week. In fact we pretended to be singers waited by the whole world for a concert. Actually we repeated before we had to made amazing costumes for representations.
I always remember all this spent with her as the best part of an easy and soft childhood.
French & English (note spelling and capitalization)
The first paragraph may be the prompt but here are some corrections:
the only one to whom you confessed...
Paragraph 2: the same as I (do)
She smiled with all her teeth
wore a dress and shoes
confessed to me one day
Paragraph 3: we became close.
the most exciting thing was...during holidays when a parent let us invite
Actually we repeated? (what?)
had to make
Paragraph 4: remember all this time spent
soft childhood? perhaps "sweet" or "wonderful" instead?
Sra
Thaank you for your help.
I have corrected.
Childhood’s twins
As a child did you ever had a favourite friend? Who was your partner whatever you did. Certainly the only one you confessed your dreams. Most of us remembered their best times with this particular person.
During my first day at school I met her. Already when I had arrived I noticed her. Actually she looked the same as I. She smiled with all her teeth and from her brown eyes. Her blonde hair was made into a ponytail with a straight fringe. She also wore a dress and shoes similar to mine. My mother confessed me one day she had thought it had been my clone.
Quickly we became close. After school if I wasn’t at her home she was at mine. Moreover we never got bored. The most exciting was during holiday when parent let us invited each other for a whole week. In fact we pretended to be singers waited by the whole world for a concert. In fact we rehearsed our show, before we had to make amazing costumes for representations.
I always remember all this time spent with her as the best part of an easy and sweet childhood.
Hello!
I'm glad to help you correct your mistakes in your article. Here are the corrections:
1. "franch" should be "French" - Since you mentioned that you're studying English, this correction is made based on the context.
2. "chilhood's" should be "childhood's" - The word "childhood" should be spelled with two "d"s, not just one.
3. "particular person" can be changed to "special person" - The word "special" conveys the meaning of uniqueness or significance.
4. "She smiled all her teeth" can be changed to "She had a big, toothy smile" - This sentence describes her smile in a more pleasant and natural way.
5. "made into a ponytail with a straight fringe" can be changed to "pulled back into a ponytail with a straight fringe" - This clarifies that her hair was pulled back and also had a straight fringe.
6. "She also wore dress and shoes similar to mine" can be changed to "She also wore a dress and shoes that were similar to mine" - This sentence adds clarity and proper syntax to the statement.
7. Change "closed" to "close" - "Became close" is the correct way to express the formation of a strong bond or relationship.
8. Add "they" after "let us" - "When our parents let us invite each other for a whole week" - This creates parallelism in the sentence.
9. Change "made" to "make" - "Actually, we repeated before we had to make amazing costumes for representations" - This change ensures verb tense agreement.
With these corrections, your article reads as follows:
Childhood's Twins
As a child, didn't you have a favorite friend? Someone who was your partner in everything you did? Certainly, the one person you confided in about your dreams. Most of us remember our best times with this special someone.
During my first day at school, I met her. Even before I had arrived, I noticed her. In fact, she looked just like me. She had a big, toothy smile and brown eyes. Her blonde hair was pulled back into a ponytail with a straight fringe. She also wore a dress and shoes that were similar to mine. One day, my mother confessed to me that she had thought she had seen my clone.
Quickly, we became close. After school, if I wasn't at her home, she was at mine. Moreover, we never got bored. The most exciting times were during holidays when our parents let us invite each other for a whole week. In fact, we pretended to be singers, eagerly awaited by the whole world for a concert. We would practice before we had to make amazing costumes for our performances.
I always remember the time I spent with her as the best part of an easy and carefree childhood.
I hope these corrections help! Let me know if you have any further questions or need additional assistance.