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Review the passage below, which contains 20 errors. Identify these errors by marking each of the errors in bold, and make your correction in parentheses after the error.
Example: My cars interior is black.
This must be marked as follows: My cars (car’s) interior is black.
The 20 errors are in the following categories: comma usage (six errors); question marks, apostrophes, and quotation marks (five errors); capitalization (six errors); and colons, semi-colons, and commonly misused words (three errors).
Passage:
Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees(‘) using their home computers.(?) Benjamin Franklin said; (,) (“)A penny saved (,) is a penny earned”. (.”) This principle applies to the American (American) and foreign online student. Todays (Today’s) students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters (,) and supplies.
The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states (United States) is one reason online courses appeal to axia college (Axia College) students. They would rather cushion there (their) financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.
Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books (books.) however (However), online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.
Additionally(,) online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones.
Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks staplers (backpacks, staplers), and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; (,) a home computer. A computer is an online students conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.
Franklin D. Roosevelt (Roosevelt) exclaimed that, “Happiness (Happiness) is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.
Incorrect:
~ degrees(‘)
~ saved (,)
~ college degree; (,) [I think they want you to change the semicolon to a colon.]
Unclear:
~ American (American)
~ Roosevelt (Roosevelt)
~ Happiness (Happiness)
Suggestions:
~ numerous books (books.) however (However), [I think they want you to put a semicolon after "books" and keep the lower-case "h" and the comma after "however."]
~ to take care of their loved ones [There's a pronoun/antecedent problem here.]
~ to complete their college [Pronoun/antecedent problem again.]
~ online students conduit to class [What do you think?]
~ Yet, even [??]
Sure! Let's go through the passage and identify and correct the errors.
1. The first error is the missing apostrophe in "students" in the phrase "students choosing" should be "students'".
2. The second error is the question mark after "computers" which should be a period.
3. The third error is the misplaced comma after "said" which should be inside the quotation marks.
4. The fourth error is the period after "earned" which should be inside the quotation marks.
5. The fifth error is the missing capitalization in "american" which should be "American".
6. The sixth error is the missing apostrophe in "Today's" to indicate possession.
7. The seventh error is the missing period at the end of the sentence after "supplies".
8. The eighth error is the missing capitalization in "United States".
9. The ninth error is the missing capitalization in "Axia College".
10. The tenth error is the wrong use of "there" instead of "their" in "cushion there financial nest eggs".
11. The eleventh error is the unnecessary comma after "books" which should be removed.
12. The twelfth error is the missing capitalization in "however".
13. The thirteenth error is the missing period at the end of the sentence after "courses".
14. The fourteenth error is the unnecessary comma after "Additionally" which should be removed.
15. The fifteenth error is the unnecessary period after "one block of courses" which should be removed.
16. The sixteenth error is the missing capitalization in "college".
17. The seventeenth error is the unnecessary comma after "backpacks" which should be removed.
18. The eighteenth error is the missing period at the end of the sentence after "he or she needs".
19. The nineteenth error is the unnecessary capitalization in "Roosevelt".
20. The twentieth error is the unnecessary period after "achievement" which should be inside the quotation marks.
Here is the corrected passage:
Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers? Benjamin Franklin said, "A penny saved is a penny earned." This principle applies to the American and foreign online student. Today's students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters, and supplies.
The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the United States is one reason online courses appeal to Axia College students. They would rather cushion their financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.
Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books. However, online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.
Additionally, online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones.
Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks, staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree: a home computer. A computer is an online student's conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.
Franklin D. Roosevelt exclaimed that "Happiness is not the mere possession of money." He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.
Hope that helps!