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I use a computer for producing final drafts but I can't actually write on it. I turn it on listen to it boot up put my fingers on the keyboard and the.....nothing. On the other hand writing on paper makes me feel as if I can conquer the whole world. When I see the ink on the page I know I'm making my mark. The words are like clay in my hands and I can rework them until they're right I may change words two three or four time before I am satisfied. On the computer screen words seem to be written in stone. They stare out at me and I find it difficult to work with them.

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  1. This is trite nonsense. What is the point you are making? I suspect you don't write very much, very often.

    Have you proofed this? YOu need to take the clay in your hands and proof it yourself first.

    If you are satisfied with this, you need to examine your standards. You can do better than this, I am certain.

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