I'm finding it difficult to correct these sentences. I hope you can help me check them.Thank you.
1)In 19th-century the greater part of black slaves was born in America though they were originally deported from West Africa.
2)They worked for white people as servants and housekeepers or as slaves on extensive (?) plantations.
3)Working conditions were very hard, because every mistake or struggle for independence was punished through cruel tortures and even the death.
4)Slaves couldn't practice their original religion, and hat to follow a modified form of Christianism (?), which defined them as servants and didn't speak of independence.
5)However, black people were able to conserve (?) their culture thanks to songs which were sung on plantations.
6)Slaves was finally abolished in 1865, when the Northern States, guid by the Republican Party and the president Abraham Licoln won the civil war against Southern States.
7) In 1984 Orwell represented (or represents) a totalitarian society, in which every form of individuality and independence is forbidden and the party has conformed people and their thoughts to its ideologies.
8) The state of Oceania described in the book can be compared to totalitarian states of the 20th century.
1) In the nineteenth ...slaves were born...
3. and even death OR even through death
4. hat to follow = had to followe
5) conserve = I like preserve better
6) Slaves were abolished= better to say: slavery was abolish ed....guid? guided...Party and president (leavea out "the")....against the Southern States
7) represented
Everything else is OK.
Sra
1) In the 19th century, most slaves in America were born in America though their ancestors were originally imported from West Africa.
2) They worked for white people as servants and housekeepers or as slaves on plantations, large and small.
3) Working conditions were very hard because every mistake or struggle for independence was punished through cruel tortures and even the death.
4) Slaves couldn't practice their original religion; they had to follow a modified form of Christianity, which defined them as servants and didn't speak of independence.
5) However, black people were able to preserve much of their cultures by means of songs which were sung on plantations.
6) Slavery was finally abolished in 1865 when the northern states, guided by the Republican Party and President Abraham Licoln, won the Civil War against southern states.
7) In 1984, Orwell presents a totalitarian society, in which every form of individuality and independence is forbidden, and the party has forced people to conform their thoughts to its ideologies.
8) The state of Oceania described in the book can be compared to totalitarian states of the 20th century.
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I'd be happy to help you! Let's go through each sentence and correct them:
1) In the 19th century, the majority of black slaves were born in America, although they were originally deported from West Africa.
- "In the" should be added before "19th century."
- "Greater part" can be changed to "majority."
- "Was" should be changed to "were" to match the subject "black slaves."
2) They worked for white people as servants, housekeepers, or as slaves on extensive plantations.
- No corrections needed.
3) Working conditions were very harsh because every mistake or struggle for independence was punished through cruel tortures, and even death.
- "Struggle" should be changed to "struggles" to match the plural subject "mistake."
- "Death" should be preceded by "and" to indicate that it is a part of the punishment.
4) Slaves couldn't practice their original religion and had to follow a modified form of Christianity, which defined them as servants and didn't speak of independence.
- "Christianism" should be changed to "Christianity" for the correct term.
- "Hat" should be changed to "had" to match the correct verb form.
5) However, black people were able to preserve their culture thanks to the songs that were sung on plantations.
- "Conserve" should be changed to "preserve" for the correct term.
- The word "which" should be changed to "that" to introduce a restrictive relative clause.
6) Slavery was finally abolished in 1865 when the Northern States, guided by the Republican Party and President Abraham Lincoln, won the civil war against the Southern States.
- "Slaves" should be changed to "slavery" to make the sentence grammatically correct.
- "Guid" should be changed to "guided" for the correct past tense of the verb "guide."
7) In 1984, Orwell represents a totalitarian society in which every form of individuality and independence is forbidden, and the party has conformed people and their thoughts to its ideologies.
- "Represented" should be changed to "represents" in order to match the present tense of the verb.
- No other corrections needed.
8) The state of Oceania described in the book can be compared to totalitarian states of the 20th century.
- No corrections needed.
I hope this helps!