Can you check how I rephrase the opening to the first chapter of Orwell's 1984? Thank you .
1) This extract is taken from G. Orwell’s 1984 and gives an insight into life (I need a synonym) in London, the capital of Oceania, a totalitarian state where the “Party” has taken over all aspects of life and aims to eradicate individuality.
2) It is set on a cold day in April of 1984, when a man named Winston Smith, returns to his home.
3)He is described as thin, frail and thirty-nine years old. He wears blue overalls, which are the uniform of the party.
4) He has very fair hair, a sanguine (synonym) face and a skin, which is roughened (I can’t find a synonym) by the use of low-quality soap and blunt razor blades.
5) The world outside seems cold to him though he observes it through a shut window-pane.
6) The street full of dust and torn paper contrasts with the bright sun shining in a harsh blue sky. It makes the place look colourless if not (?) for the posters which are plastered everywhere. 7
7)In particular, he is surrounded by posters showing a blacmoustached man gazing down over the words “Big brother is watching you”.
8) Big Brother is the face of the Party. The citizens are told that he is the leader of the nation and the head of the Party, but Winston can never determine whether or not he actually exists.
1) This extract is taken from Geoge Orwell’s 1984 and gives a glimpse into life in London, the capital of Oceania, a totalitarian state where the Party has taken over all aspects of life and aims to eradicate individuality.
2) It is set on a cold day in April, 1984, when a man named Winston Smith returns to his home.
3) He is described as a thin, frail thirty-nine year old man. He wears blue overalls, the uniform of the party.
4) He has very fair hair and a ruddy complexion, roughened by the use of low-quality soap and blunt razor blades.
5) The world outside seems cold to him though he observes it through a closed window.
6) The street full of dust and torn paper contrasts with the bright sun shining in a harsh blue sky. It makes the place look colourless except for the posters which are plastered everywhere.
7) In particular, he is surrounded by posters showing a black-moustached man gazing down over the words "Big brother is watching you."
8) Big Brother is the face of the Party. The citizens are told that he is the leader of the nation and the head of the Party, but Winston can never determine whether or not he actually exists.