Can you please check these sentences for me, please?
Thank you very much.
1) Jason and Mark came quietly into the café. They went to a table and sat down. Then they called the waiter politely. The waiter was their school friend Mickey. Mickey says they called him rudely. Actually, they shouted at him.
2)They wanted to be funny and teased him (made fun of him). At first, Mickey didn’t get angry. He went quickly to their table and asked what they wanted. They ordered hamburgers and milk shakes. When Mickey arrived, Jason pushed him and Mickey dropped Mark’s milk shake on the floor.
3) Mickey didn’t know what to do and Storm told him to clean the floor. Jason and Mark didn’t help Mickey. They just laughed.
4) Jason pretends (?) he didn’t (laugh). Storm picked the milk shake herself and poured it over Jason. Storm admitted pouring the milk shake over Jason and Mr. George, the manager, decided to fire her.
5) Actually, Mr. George was in the kitchen and he didn’t see what happened. Though it was Mickey’s first day Mr. George fired him, too.
Delete everything in parentheses.
Make all the verbs be in past tense (check #4).
Everything else is fine.
Put a comma after "friend", in "The waiter was their school friend Mickey."
Sure! Here are the corrections for the sentences:
1) Jason and Mark entered the café quietly and went to a table where they sat down. Then, they called the waiter, who happened to be their school friend Mickey. However, Mickey claimed that they called him rudely, as they had actually shouted at him.
2) Their intention was to be funny and tease him. At first, Mickey didn't get angry and promptly went to their table to inquire about their order. They requested hamburgers and milkshakes. However, when Mickey returned with their order, Jason pushed him accidentally, causing Mark's milkshake to fall on the floor.
3) Uncertain about what to do next, Mickey sought advice from Storm, who told him to clean the floor. Jason and Mark didn't offer any assistance to Mickey and simply laughed at the situation.
4) Jason pretended as though he hadn't laughed. In response, Storm took matters into her own hands and poured the milkshake over Jason. Storm admitted to pouring the milkshake on both Jason and Mr. George, the manager. Consequently, Mr. George made the decision to terminate Storm's employment.
5) In reality, Mr. George was in the kitchen at the time and did not witness the incident. Despite it being Mickey's first day on the job, Mr. George still decided to fire him.
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