I forgot to include the following sentences. I included a question mark next to the phrases I find it difficult to rephrase.
1) The mariner tells him how "the ship was cheered and the harbour cleared (?)." "They dropped below the church." How can I rephrase this?
2) The ice was as high as the mast and as green as emerald. The snowy cliffs sent a mysterious sheen which contrasts with the brightness of the sun.
3)They were entirely surrounded by ice. This is presented as a dangerous creature which made deep, very loud noises. (" It cracked and growled and roared and howled").
4) Finally, an albatross came through the fog and was greeted as if it had been a Christian soul.
5) The albatross ate food it had never eaten before and flew round the ship (?). The ice split as a thunder-fit (how can I rephrase this?) and the helmsman steered them through. (?)
6)A good South wind sprung up behind (?). The albatross followed them for nine nights while the white Moon glimmered through a fog-smoke white (?).
7)The narrator interrupts his description and begs God to save the mariner from the fiends that plague him. He continues his story saying that the mariner shot the albatross with his crossbow.
1. I do not understand "they dropped below the church." Could that be "they dropped anchor?" I would need further information.
2. I question the verb "contrasts" because all the other verbs are in the past tense. I'd have said "contrasted."
5. "thunder-fit?" as the sound of thunder?
6. "behind?" behind what? behind the ship, behind them? "fog-smoke white" sounds better as "white smokey fog?"
Sra