my informative essay below include quotes. i asked my teacher if i have to write a reference of where i got them, but she said not to because she will know when she sees the quotation marks. anyways, here is the introduction i improvised and my second paragraph.
India is known as a land of diversity because of its many cultures and celebrations. One of my favorite festivals to celebrate is called Holi, which is a celebration of the victory of good over the evil. Holi is “an ancient East Indian Festival held at the time of the full moon in March” by the Hindus. The Holi festival is celebrated with various types of events that spread throughout the week, which include bonfires, dancing, and singing. This happy occasion is known as the Festival of Colors because it involves children, friends, and neighbors gathering on the streets together, and a riot of color takes over. Colored powders are thrown into air and are smeared on faces and bodies. While the colors associated with Holi are the main part of this celebration, the true reason of celebrating Holi is to keep the evil spirits away. Not only is Holi a joyous, colorful festival to celebrate with friends and family, but it is also meant to celebrate the death of winter and evil. The colors, however, used in this festival represent the arrival of spring.
The literal meaning of the word Holi is ‘burning.’ There are different types of legends and myths to define the meaning of this word, but it depends on which part of India one is from. I’m from southern India so we believe the legend of Holi revolves around a demon king, Hiranyakashyap. King Hiranyakashyp’s dream was to have everyone worship only him. However, his son, Prahlad was devoted to another king known as Lord Vishnu, the protector of those who love him. The king then ordered his sister, Holika, to kill his son by burning him in a fire. Holika had a gift which she can throw herself in fire, and come out without any damage. The fact that she was not aware of was that the gift only worked when she enters the fire alone. When she and Prahlad jumped in the fire together, Holika paid for her mistakes by burning to death, whereas Prahlad was saved by his protector, Lord Vishnu. The festival, therefore, celebrates the victory of good over evil.
please correct my grammar. and my thesis in my introduction is the last two sentences. does it make sense or should i come up with another way to reword it.
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India is known as a land of diversity because of its many cultures and celebrations. One of my favorite festivals to celebrate is called Holi, which is a celebration of the victory of good over the evil. Holi is “an ancient East Indian Festival held at the time of the full moon in March” by the Hindus. The Holi festival is celebrated with various types of events that<~~delete “that” spread throughout the week, which include bonfires, dancing, and singing. This happy occasion is known as the Festival of Colors because it involves children, friends, and neighbors gathering on the streets together, and a riot of color takes over. Colored powders are thrown into air and are smeared on faces and bodies. While the colors associated with Holi are the main part of this celebration, the true reason of<~~change “of” to “for” celebrating Holi is to keep the evil spirits away. Not only is Holi a joyous, colorful festival to celebrate with friends and family, but it is also meant to celebrate the death of winter and evil. The colors, however, used in this festival represent the arrival of spring.
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Your thesis is OK, but would be stronger if you could rephrase and put those ideas into ONE sentence.
Everything else looks good.
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There are different legends and myths to define the meaning of this word, but the explanation of Holi depends on which part of India one is from.
i fixed the second sentence from paragraph 2. is that better
Here is the revised version of your introduction and second paragraph, with some grammar corrections:
India is known as a land of diversity because of its many cultures and celebrations. One of my favorite festivals to celebrate is called Holi, which is a celebration of the victory of good over evil. Holi is "an ancient East Indian Festival held at the time of the full moon in March" by Hindus. The Holi festival is celebrated with various types of events that spread throughout the week, including bonfires, dancing, and singing. This happy occasion is known as the Festival of Colors because it involves children, friends, and neighbors gathering on the streets together, and a riot of color takes over. Colored powders are thrown into the air and smeared on faces and bodies. While the colors associated with Holi are the main part of this celebration, the true reason for celebrating Holi is to keep evil spirits away. Not only is Holi a joyous, colorful festival to celebrate with friends and family, but it also symbolizes the end of winter and the triumph of good over evil. The colors used in this festival represent the arrival of spring.
The literal meaning of the word Holi is 'burning.' There are different legends and myths to explain the meaning of this word, which vary depending on which part of India one is from. I am from southern India, so we believe the legend of Holi revolves around a demon king named Hiranyakashyap. King Hiranyakashyp's dream was to have everyone worship only him. However, his son, Prahlad, was devoted to another king known as Lord Vishnu, the protector of those who love him. The king then ordered his sister, Holika, to kill his son by burning him in a fire. Holika had a gift which allowed her to throw herself into fire and come out without any damage. However, she was not aware that the gift only worked when she entered the fire alone. When she and Prahlad jumped into the fire together, Holika paid for her mistakes by burning to death, whereas Prahlad was saved by his protector, Lord Vishnu. The festival, therefore, celebrates the victory of good over evil.
Regarding your thesis in the introduction, the last two sentences do provide a clear explanation of the purpose of celebrating Holi. However, it might be beneficial to reword it to make it more concise and impactful. For example: "Holi is not only a joyous festival of colors but also a symbolic celebration of the triumph of good over evil and the arrival of spring." This rephrasing condenses the main points and highlights the key elements of the festival.