Part III: Revision
In this section of the final, revise the sentences provided to correct the grammar errors indicated. (In many cases there will be more than one correct alternative to the sentence provided; credit will be given for all correct answers.)
Revise the following word groups to remove all fragments.
35. There are two reasons why. I like baseball. It is fun. And for the good exercise.
There are two reasons why I like baseball: it is fun and for the good exercise.
36. The White Sox are really good at the fundamentals of baseball. Which is why they won the World Series in 2005.
The White Sox are really good at the fundamentals of baseball, which is why they won the World Series in 2005.
Revise the following word groups to remove all run-on sentences.
37. Studying is hard work many students find they study better when they take regular breaks.
Study is hard work. Many students find they study better when they take regular breaks.
38. Some tests are so hard that no one does well on them other tests are too easy and don't really test comprehension.
Some tests are so hard that no one does well on them, while other tests are too easy and don’t really test comprehension.
Revise the following sentences so that the subjects and verbs agree with one another.
39. One of my friends want to attend my graduation ceremony.
One of my friends wanted to attend my graduation ceremony.
40. Seven cats, two monkeys, and a dog plays in the store window.
Seven cats, two monkeys, and a dog play in the window.
Revise the following sentences to remove all pronoun errors.
41. When a police officer fires his gun, he must fill out a lot of paperwork.
When a police officer fires their gun, he or she must fill out a lot of paperwork.
42. When a teacher writes an exam, they think about what aspects of student learning they want to test.
When a teacher writes an exam, they think about what aspects of student learning he or she wants to test.
Revise the following sentences to remove all apostrophe errors.
43. Some people know where they parked they're car's, and some dont.
Some people know where they parked their cars, but some don’t.
44. I gave you your's, and Im sorry if its broken now.
I gave you yours, and I’m sorry if it’s broken now.
Revise the following sentences to make one of the existing sentences subordinate to the other.
45. The hurricane destroyed some oil rigs. Fuel prices rose.
The hurricane destroyed some oil rigs, fuel prices rose.
46. People know they are going to have to retire, but they often don't save enough money to do so comfortably.
People know they are going to have to retire, but they often don’t save enough money to do so comfortably.
Revise the following sentences to remove all errors in the use of quotation marks and all incorrect punctuation.
47. Have you ever read the story "The Tell-Tale Heart" by Edgar Allan Poe? Dave asked.
“Have you ever read the story ‘The Tell-Tale Heart’ by Edgar Allan Poe?” Dave asked.
48. Did the professor say Put down your pencils? Janice asked.
“Did the professor say ‘Put down your pencils’?” Janice asked.
Revise the following sentences to create parallel constructions.
49. To succeed in the new economy, workers will have to learn throughout their careers, adapt to changing circumstances, and self-motivation will be needed.
In the new economy, workers will have to learn throughout their careers, adapt to changing circumstances, and self-motivation will be needed to succeed.
50. Some students hate math, some students dislike math, and math is liked by other students.
Some students hate math, some students dislike math, and some students like math.
#35 is OK, but I'd put a capital "I" on "it" after the colon since it's the beginning of an independent clause.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/colon.htm
#36 seems OK, but the problem is that the relative pronoun "which" does not have a clear antecedent.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/pronouns.htm
#37 and 38 are correct.
#39 is correct, but I think the answer that's expected is "wants" (present tense, not past).
#40 is fine.
#41 is not correct. Write it with "police officers" and then change all pronouns to plural.
#42 is also not correct. Write it with "teachers" and then change all pronouns to plural.
#43 and 44 are correct.
#45 and 46 are not correct. In 45, you have created a run-on. In 46, you still have two independent clauses. To make one of the clauses dependent or subordinate to the main (independent) clause, start that clause with a subordinating conjunction:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/conjunctions.htm#subordinating_conjunctions
#47 and 48 are correct.
#49 is incorrect, but #50 is correct.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm
well i don't know but if you look it up some where you will find it :)
35. There are two reasons why I like baseball: it is fun and for the good exercise.
Explanation: Combine the two fragments into a single sentence using a colon to introduce the reasons.
36. The White Sox are really good at the fundamentals of baseball, which is why they won the World Series in 2005.
Explanation: Combine the two fragments into a single sentence using a comma and the relative pronoun "which" to connect them.
37. Studying is hard work, and many students find they study better when they take regular breaks.
Explanation: Separate the run-on sentence into two sentences using a comma followed by the coordinating conjunction "and."
38. Some tests are so hard that no one does well on them, while other tests are too easy and don’t really test comprehension.
Explanation: Separate the run-on sentence into two sentences using a comma and the coordinating conjunction "while."
39. One of my friends wanted to attend my graduation ceremony.
Explanation: Change "want" to "wanted" so that the subject "one" agrees with the singular verb "wanted."
40. Seven cats, two monkeys, and a dog play in the window.
Explanation: Change "plays" to "play" so that the subject "cats, monkeys, and dog" agrees with the plural verb "play."
41. When a police officer fires their gun, he or she must fill out a lot of paperwork.
Explanation: Change "his" to "their" to ensure gender-neutral language.
42. When a teacher writes an exam, he or she thinks about what aspects of student learning he or she wants to test.
Explanation: Change "they" to "he or she" to ensure gender-neutral language.
43. Some people know where they parked their cars, but some don’t.
Explanation: Change "car’s" to "cars" to indicate plural possession.
44. I gave you yours, and I’m sorry if it’s broken now.
Explanation: Change "your’s" to "yours" and "its" to "it’s" to correct the use of apostrophes.
45. The hurricane destroyed some oil rigs, causing fuel prices to rise.
Explanation: Make the second sentence subordinate to the first by using a participle phrase.
46. People know they are going to have to retire, but often they don’t save enough money to do so comfortably.
Explanation: Make the second sentence subordinate to the first by adding "often" before the subject "they."
47. "Have you ever read the story ‘The Tell-Tale Heart’ by Edgar Allan Poe?" Dave asked.
Explanation: Use double quotation marks for the quoted sentence and single quotation marks for the title.
48. "Did the professor say 'Put down your pencils'?" Janice asked.
Explanation: Use single quotation marks for the quoted sentence and double quotation marks for the quoted words.
49. In the new economy, workers will have to learn throughout their careers, adapt to changing circumstances, and be self-motivated to succeed.
Explanation: Use parallel structure by starting each item in the list with the same verb form.
50. Some students hate math, some students dislike math, and some students like math.
Explanation: Use parallel structure by starting each item in the list with the same structure and verb form.