I need help. I need to revise any run-on sentences. The first one is this. Not sure if these are correct.
Death Valley National Monument located in Southern California and Nevada, is one of the hottest place on earth. Temperatures there have soared as high as 134 degrees Fahrenheit.
Anamaria opened the boxes crammed with toys, out sprang griffins, dragons, and phoenixes.
Subatomic physics is filled with strange and marvelous particles; tiny bodies of matter that shiver, wobble, pulse, and flatten to no thickness at all.
As his first major project, Frederick Law Olmsted designed New York City’s Central Park, one of the most beautiful urban spaces in the United States.
The neurosurgeon explained that the medication could have one side effect, it might cause me to experience temporary memory loss.
1 and 4 are right.
You need to divide each of the other three into two sentences.
What about this
Subatomic physics is filled with strange and marvelous particles: tiny bodies of matter that shiver, wobble, pulse, and flatten to no thickness at all.
Right!
To revise the run-on sentences, you can use various techniques such as adding a coordinating conjunction, using a semicolon, or breaking the sentence into separate sentences. Here are the revised versions of the sentences you provided:
1. Death Valley National Monument, located in Southern California and Nevada, is one of the hottest places on earth. Temperatures there have soared as high as 134 degrees Fahrenheit.
Explanation: I added a comma after "Monument" to separate the location information and used the plural form of "place" to match the plural subject.
2. Anamaria opened the boxes crammed with toys, and out sprang griffins, dragons, and phoenixes.
Explanation: I added the coordinating conjunction "and" after the comma to connect the two independent clauses.
3. Subatomic physics is filled with strange and marvelous particles; these tiny bodies of matter shiver, wobble, pulse, and flatten to no thickness at all.
Explanation: I used a semicolon to separate the two independent clauses and added the pronoun "these" to refer to the particles.
4. As his first major project, Frederick Law Olmsted designed New York City’s Central Park. It is considered one of the most beautiful urban spaces in the United States.
Explanation: I broke the sentence into two separate sentences to avoid the run-on. I also used the pronoun "It" to refer back to Central Park.
5. The neurosurgeon explained that the medication could have one side effect: it might cause me to experience temporary memory loss.
Explanation: I used a colon to introduce the consequence or explanation of the side effect. I also replaced the pronoun "it" with "the medication" for clarity.