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How would you put this in your own words. My teacher gave this to us as an example and were suppose to fix it to make it stronger.

I deserve this scholarship, because I have the ability to follow through with all the hard work it will take to achieve my dreams and my goals. I believe in myself and I believe, with this scholarship, it will give me the foundation I need to build a better me, and enable me to become a person who makes a difference in this world. "

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  1. I'd start it with the strongest statement.

    I want to make a difference in the world.

    Then include how you want to make a difference and your abilities to achieve these goals.

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    posted by Ms. Sue

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