Mr. Henry Axhelm
Math
Period 2, Room 107
I teach five classes a day,
Not students, just classes.
No sense getting involved
With their personal problems.
Nothing in their heads worth listening to, anyway.
They came here to socialise,
To see who's "cute."
So I put my x's and y's on the board
And keep my distance.
On Saturdays I like to fool around
With my ham radio set.
It's been my hobby for fifteen years.
I'm on the air for hours at a time.
It's nice to talk to people
Who are far away.
~By Mel Glenn
Make the Poem Come ALIVE- Write an Anonymous Note to the Teacher
Imagine that you are a student in Mr. Axhelm's class. You recognize that he is not happy with his job, that he is lonely and that he should be happier as a teacher if only he would change his attitude towards students.
There was a choice between 2 activities and I chose this one:
Write a note telling Mr. Axhelm how it feels to be a student in his class and how the experience compares with being a student in a class with an involved, interested teacher.
Could you please check to see if everything is alright. Please point out any grammatical errors, and sentences that don't make sense. Thank you very much for all your help :-)
To: Mr. Axhelm
I remember the first time I entered
your class and met you. I thought I'd
get to learn things step by step
gently. With you it's the opposite
case. I understand that you are a
teacher, and that teaching about
things is your job. Though, there are
also other teacher here, who teach
pleasantly. They always greet us
anxiously. With you, it's never like
that. It seems as if you don't even
notice us. I always thought that every
teacher would teach their
students willingly; With you it seems
dull. There is a thing such as
amusement. I know that you have it
located deep within you. It's time
for you to unlock it Mr. Axhelm. I
don't know why you don't talk much,
but please, if there's something
bothering you, then please don't keep
it hidden within you. Your sorrow will
get lessened if you share it with
someone understanding. Yo can trust me
Mr. Axhelm. I sincerely want you to be
happy by heart. Your smile will light
up the whole classroom, and I'm sure
this light will catch everyone's
attention. You will be seen in the
crowd Mr. Axhelm.
Live, Laugh, and Love
From Sara
To: Mr. Axhelm
I remember the first time I entered your class and met you. I thought I'd get to learn things step by step, gently. With you, it's the opposite case. I understand that you are a teacher and that teaching is your job. However, there are other teachers here who teach with enthusiasm. They always greet us eagerly. With you, it's never like that. It seems as if you don't even notice us. I always thought that every teacher would teach their students willingly; with you, it seems dull. There is such a thing as amusement. I know that you have it located deep within you. It's time for you to unlock it, Mr. Axhelm. I don't know why you don't talk much, but please, if there's something bothering you, then please don't keep it hidden within you. Your sorrow will lessen if you share it with someone understanding. You can trust me, Mr. Axhelm. I sincerely want you to be happy from the bottom of my heart. Your smile will light up the whole classroom, and I'm sure this light will catch everyone's attention. You will be seen in the crowd, Mr. Axhelm.
Live, laugh, and love,
Sara
To: Mr. Axhelm
I remember the first time I entered your class and met you. I thought I would get to learn things step by step, gently. However, with you, it's the opposite. I understand that teaching is your job, but there are other teachers here who teach more pleasantly. They always greet us eagerly, but with you, it's never like that. It seems as if you don't even notice us. I always thought that every teacher would teach their students willingly, but with you, it seems dull.
There is a thing called amusement. I know that you have it located deep within you. It's time for you to unlock it, Mr. Axhelm. I don't know why you don't talk much, but please, if there's something bothering you, then please don't keep it hidden within you. Your sorrow will lessen if you share it with someone understanding. You can trust me, Mr. Axhelm. I sincerely want you to be happy in your heart. Your smile will light up the whole classroom, and I'm sure this light will catch everyone's attention. You will be seen in the crowd, Mr. Axhelm.
Live, Laugh, and Love
From Sara
Grammar and sentence suggestions:
- "Though, there are also other teachers here, who teach pleasantly" can be changed to "However, there are other teachers here who teach more pleasantly."
- "With you it seems dull" can be changed to "With you, it seems dull."
- "There is a thing such as amusement" can be changed to "There is something called amusement."
- "Yo can trust me" can be changed to "You can trust me."
- "You will be seen in the crowd, Mr. Axhelm" can be changed to "You will stand out in the crowd, Mr. Axhelm."