This is the same poem I've been working on a couple of weeks ago. I have finished the ending, and would like some of your help. It will say somewhere in my poem(Any suggestions) I will appreciate all the help you could give me. Thank you very much:-)
The magic box
I will put in the box
Hugs and kisses from my family
The daylight brought from the sun and
My parent’s blessings
I will put in the box
The teardrop of my eye
The first smiles of my baby brothers
The classical music playing in my heart
I will put into the box
My cousin’s dimples
The cold breeze blowing in the air
And memories from the past
I will put in the box the strongest force of love which I have gained and shared
Every heart’s compassion for affection
And my mom's lullaby
I will put in the box all passion, desire and hope
All the wonderful dreams experienced
The holy bible as a sign of god being with me
I will put in the box the honesty of the innocence
The unquenchable thirst for love
Lastly, I will put in it a door, leading to a fantasy quest
My box is styled with sequins, seashells and exotic souvenirs. There is a mirror on the lid with glitter all around. It will capture all reflections and add them to the box. Its hinges are ......I’m trying to think of something imaginative, but I can’t. Before I wanted to say, its hinges are the fingertips of a human; but that kind of seems gross. I want it to be something wonderful. Can you please give a few suggestions?
I shall travel in my box
To wherever destiny leads me, bumping into dangers, facing new challenges,
and ......I can’t think of an ending either. I was thinking before of saying, and starting the journey all over; something like that, but I don’t like it. I want it to be wonderful. Do you have any suggestions?
Sorry, one more thing. Does fantasy quest make sense? Is there any other way I could reword that?
fantasy quest is good.
hinges like links, bonds, springs...
experiences the seven wonders of the world / new cultures
Sorry, but my brain is not working well at this hour!
Sra
Thank you SraJMcGin, you helped me a alot:-)
Certainly! Here are a few suggestions for the imaginative hinges of your box:
1. "Its hinges are crafted from the fluttering wings of fairies, allowing it to open with enchanting grace."
2. "Its hinges are formed by the tender embrace of whispering wind, granting it a gentle and seamless swing."
3. "Its hinges are delicately woven from threads of stardust, imbuing it with a celestial shimmer as it unfolds."
And for the ending of your poem, here are some suggestions:
1. "and embracing the unknown, I find my true self, soaring on the wings of possibility."
2. "and as each chapter unfolds, I discover boundless wonders, painting my life's canvas with vibrant hues."
3. "and with every step taken, my spirit dances with joy, for the journey itself is the destination I seek."
Remember, poetry is a personal expression, so feel free to modify or combine these suggestions based on your own style and the overall theme of your poem.