Thank you very, very much for your last corrections! Can you tell me if the following expressions are possible and therefore correct?
1) When approaching/charging the dragon, Beowulf raised his shield and drew his sword. Differently, in contrast, (can you suggest to me other sentence connectors stressing a contrast?), the dragon coiled itself and spat fire (,instead at the end is also possible?)
2) In order to/so as to kill the fire-breathing dragon Beowulf raised his towering shield.
3) In “Beowulf” there are many kennings to describe both Beowulf and the fire-breathing monster (many kennings are used/ occur to describe ….) are all the expressions possible?
4) Both are descendents of a human being (Cain).
5) Trade improved thanks to the guilds, associations of tradesmen and artisans (Can you also say “trade was improved by the guilds?”)
6) The dragon seized Beowulf’s neck between his poisonous fangs.
7) Your conclusion must be drawn on the basis of what you have written before. You can’t start a sentence with “in conclusion” and then add a new point.
8) The sword struck the dragon less strongly (can you replace it with “powerfully”?) than required.
9) Beowulf and the dragon represent the good and the evil (or “good” and “evil” without definite article) respectively. Can you say “Beowulf is the symbol of good whereas the dragon that of evil?”
10) Those peasants who survive the black death became richer because they were able to ask for (demand?) payment for work done on their lord’s land.
1) The expression "When approaching/charging the dragon" is correct. Instead of "differently" or "in contrast," you can use other sentence connectors such as "on the other hand," "however," or "in stark contrast." For example, "When approaching/charging the dragon, Beowulf raised his shield and drew his sword. However, the dragon coiled itself and spat fire." In addition, using "instead" at the end is also possible, such as "When approaching/charging the dragon, Beowulf raised his shield and drew his sword. The dragon, instead, coiled itself and spat fire."
2) Both "in order to" and "so as to" are correct in this context. For example, "In order to/So as to kill the fire-breathing dragon, Beowulf raised his towering shield."
3) The expressions "many kennings are used/occur to describe" are both possible. For example, "In 'Beowulf,' there are many kennings to describe both Beowulf and the fire-breathing monster."
4) The expression "Both are descendants of a human being (Cain)" is correct.
5) The expression "Trade improved thanks to the guilds, associations of tradesmen and artisans" is correct. You can also say "Trade was improved by the guilds."
6) The expression "The dragon seized Beowulf's neck between his poisonous fangs" is correct.
7) The expression "Your conclusion must be drawn on the basis of what you have written before" is correct. Starting a sentence with "In conclusion" and then adding a new point is not recommended. It is better to summarize the points made before without introducing new information.
8) The expression "The sword struck the dragon less strongly/powerfully than required" is correct.
9) The expression "Beowulf and the dragon represent the good and the evil respectively" is correct. You can also say "Beowulf is the symbol of good, whereas the dragon is the symbol of evil."
10) The expression "Those peasants who survive the black death became richer because they were able to ask for/demand payment for work done on their lord's land" is correct. Both "ask for" and "demand" are possible in this context.