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Christmas should be a time of celebrating the birth of Christ, but it seems like people make it more about themselves and what should they get for each other and who’s gift is more expensive or how we can compete when it comes to decorating our homes, gifts, food, how much money we spend and how we look.
When you watch Television you should see more stories about the Christ his life and more religious topics but you see advertisements about different department stores, how big your Television should be, what is the next trend or how big and fancy you can make your dining table to basically show off in front of your friends.
The general meaning of Christmas is to teach your kids about Christ, teach them how to be kind to people and that Christmas is more about giving not taking. Let your kids know you can always make a gift for some one because it comes from your heart and it means something and it is more special.
In conclusion Televisions and Advertisement Companies should stop ruining the meaning of Christmas by advertising about how much you should spend to show how much you love someone and educate people more about giving and being kind to each other.
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Here's a proofread version of your story:
Christmas should be a time of celebrating the birth of Christ, but it seems like people make it more about themselves and what they should get for each other. They tend to focus on whose gift is more expensive, how to compete in decorating homes, choosing expensive gifts, preparing lavish meals, spending large amounts of money, and even how they look.
When you watch television, you would expect to see more stories about Christ's life and other religious topics. However, what you see instead are advertisements promoting different department stores, emphasizing the size of your television, suggesting the next trend, and showcasing elaborate dining tables meant to impress friends.
The true meaning of Christmas is to teach children about Christ, to instill in them the importance of kindness towards others, and to emphasize that Christmas is about giving, not taking. It's crucial to let your children know that they can always create a meaningful gift for someone from the heart, as that carries more significance and is truly special.
In conclusion, television and advertisement companies should stop distorting the true meaning of Christmas. Instead, they should focus on promoting the value of giving and being kind to one another.