Satisfy me by improving this and I'll be thankful to you 4ever.

In the following paragraphs I will be talking about her life, where and who she performed with, which songs she sang, and what awards she won, and her charity work.

It seems like Im missin something around in there somewhere, sentences are all like patched up together

you seem to be missing parallel structure...

"In the following paragraphs, I will be elaborating on her musical ambitions, such as the places she's performed, the people she's performed with, the pieces she's sung, and the awards she has won throughout this. Her life also consisted of charity works,........"

if it were me, the beginning of the paragraph discusses her musical ambitions and then you just kind of throw charity work in there. i would separate them. it's seems like ur trying to shove too much into one sentence.

elisabeth ur sentence is way better compared to mine, thanks B.F

Sure, I'd be happy to help you improve your paragraph! Here's a revised version:

In the following paragraphs, I will be discussing the remarkable life of [person's name]. I will delve into her experiences as a performer, explore her collaborations with various artists and groups, highlight some of the notable songs she has sung, shine a light on the prestigious awards she has won, and touch upon her philanthropic endeavors.

By structuring your paragraph in this way, you will provide a more organized and coherent flow of information. Additionally, it would be beneficial to include specific details or examples under each category to make your writing more engaging and informative.