Hey, I have to write a 200-250 word paper on my life in the future as a famous person. I am in a magazine, and i have to write about how my life, career, and family are. I have received help from others, and I was hoping someone could double-check my work before I turn it in tomorrow. I just need help with someone proofreading my Spanish. Thanks!

SPANISH: La revista de prensa rosa, In Touch, escribe un artículo sobre mí. En 2016, yo soy el director general de los Yanquis de Nueva York, el equipo de béisbol. Yo trabajo para George Steinbrenner, el jefe, y nosotros ganamos tres campeonatos. Yo contraté a Derek Jeter, a Bernie Williams y a Jorge Posada como entrenadores. Mariano Rivera es el entrenador de cabecera. Yo tengo una esposa bonita y dos niños. Los niños tienen uno y dos años. Mi trabajo es maravilloso, pero mantengo realmente ocupado hablando con otros directores. Yo siempre tengo que utilizar mi teléfono celular para hablar con otros equipos acerca de negociar jugadores. También, yo siempre viajo con el equipo cuando los juegos fuera de la ciudad. Durante los juegos, yo me siento en en lo alto del estadio con los otros líderes. Yo vivo en una mansión en Staten Island, Nueva York, el lugar donde nací. Conseguí el trabajo cuando tenía veinte y tres años porque encontré a George Steinbrenner en un restaurante. Yo me especialicé en negocios asi que me empleó como interno. Después de un año como interno, él me empleó como el director general para el equipo. Aunque mantengo esté ocupado, yo trabajo con varias caridades para ayudar a los niños pobres. Yo planeo trabajar por veinte años más. Mi familia ha estado muy orgullosa y ha apoyado mis logros. Sin ellos, yo no tendría éxito.

ENGLISH: The tabloids in the magazine, In Touch, writes an article about me. In 2016, I am the general manager of the New York Yankees, the baseball team. I work for George Steinbrenner, the boss, and we won three championships. I signed Derek Jeter, Bernie Williams, and Jorge Posada as coaches. Mariano Rivera is the pitching coach. I have a beautiful wife and two children. The children are one and two years old. My job is wonderful, but i am really busy talking to other managers. I always have to use my cell phone to talk to other teams about trading players. Also, I am always traveling with the team when the games are out of town. At games, I sit in the top of the stadium with the other leaders. I live in a mansion in Staten Island, New York, the place where I was born. I got the job when I was 24 because I met George Steinbrenner in a restaurant. I specialized in business so he hired me as an intern. After a year as an intern, he hired me as the manager for the team. Although I am busy, I work with several charities to help poor children. I plan to work for twenty more years. My family have been very proud and supportive of my accomplishments. Without them, I would not be successful.

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Posted by Mark on Wednesday, September 27, 2006 at 4:31pm.

Hey, I have to write a 200-250 word paper on my life in the future as a famous person. I am in a magazine, and i have to write about how my life, career, and family are. I have received help from others, and I was hoping someone could double-check my work before I turn it in tomorrow. I just need help with someone proofreading my Spanish. Thanks!

SPANISH: La revista de prensa rosa, In Touch, escribe un artículo sobre mí. En 2016, yo soy el director general de los Yanquis de Nueva York, el equipo de béisbol. Yo trabajo para George Steinbrenner, el jefe, y nosotros ganamos tres campeonatos. Yo contraté a Derek Jeter, a Bernie Williams y a Jorge Posada como entrenadores. Mariano Rivera es el entrenador de cabecera.(as I mentioned yesterday I don't believe you mean the "pitching" of a boat in rough water!) Yo tengo una esposa bonita y dos niños. Los niños tienen uno y dos años. Mi trabajo es maravilloso, pero mantengo
(not as idiomatic as "estoy") realmente ocupado hablando con otros directores. Yo siempre tengo que utilizar mi teléfono celular para hablar con otros equipos acerca de negociar jugadores. También, yo siempre viajo con el equipo cuando los juegos (again, please check the meaning of "juegos" like baseball, tennis, etc. and "partidos" which I supplied yesterday for you!+ están) fuera de la ciudad. Durante los juegos,(same error) yo me siento en en lo alto del estadio con los otros líderes. Yo vivo en una mansión en Staten Island, Nueva York, el lugar donde nací. Conseguí el trabajo cuando tenía veinte y tres (La Academia Real now prefers "veintitrés" as the preferred spelling!) años porque encontré a George Steinbrenner en un restaurante. Yo me especialicé en negocios asi que me empleó como interno. Después de un año como interno, él me empleó como el director general para el equipo. Aunque mantengo(delete the preceding word) esté ocupado, yo trabajo con varias caridades para ayudar a los niños pobres. Yo planeo trabajar por veinte años más. Mi familia ha estado muy orgullosa y ha apoyado mis logros. (successes accomplishments which you had in the English = prendas or talentos = please look AGAIN at the corrections from yesterday!) Sin ellos, yo no tendría éxito.

ENGLISH: The tabloids in the magazine, In Touch, writes an article about me. In 2016, I am the general manager of the New York Yankees, the baseball team. I work for George Steinbrenner, the boss, and we won three championships. I signed Derek Jeter, Bernie Williams, and Jorge Posada as coaches. Mariano Rivera is the pitching coach. I have a beautiful wife and two children. The children are one and two years old. My job is wonderful, but i am really busy talking to other managers. I always have to use my cell phone to talk to other teams about trading players. Also, I am always traveling with the team when the games are out of town. At games, I sit in the top of the stadium with the other leaders. I live in a mansion in Staten Island, New York, the place where I was born. I got the job when I was 24 because I met George Steinbrenner in a restaurant. I specialized in business so he hired me as an intern. After a year as an intern, he hired me as the manager for the team. Although I am busy, I work with several charities to help poor children. I plan to work for twenty more years. My family have been very proud and supportive of my accomplishments. Without them, I would not be successful.

Better but still needs a few corrections; see above.

Thanks again! I had actually submitted a rough one, so I had already fixed those changes. I found 'pitching coach' in a baseball dictionary so i fixed that, and i switched to partidos and took out the 'mantengo'. i appreciate your help

You're welcome! I'm glad I could help. It's great that you made the necessary changes based on the feedback you received. It's always important to double-check and make sure that your work is accurate and free of errors.

Regarding the term "pitching coach," it's great that you found it in a baseball dictionary. It's always a good idea to consult reliable sources when working on specific topics. The term "partidos" is indeed a better choice when referring to games in Spanish. And removing "mantengo" was a good decision as well.

Remember, when writing in Spanish, it's important to pay attention to grammar, word choice, and sentence structure. Reviewing and correcting your work is a valuable step to ensure clarity and accuracy, especially when writing in a foreign language.

If you have any more questions or need further assistance, feel free to ask!