Can you check for the last time my rephrase of this poem and I suggest me an appropriate synonym for soldiered and turf? Thanks
We were holding each other tightly without ever leaving each other. We enjoyed going up and down, making excursions, being powerful. We stretched our elbows and held our fingers tightly because we didn't want to lose each other. We were armed and fearless, we didn't follow any laws. We sailed, soldiered , stole and threatened We alarmed the stingy, the servants and the priests, breathed air, drank water, danced on the turf or on the sea-beach. We plundered cities, despised ease and statutes, chased weakness and we made forays
fearless, we didn't follow = this is a run-on sentence. Just make the comma a semicolon = fearless; we didn't...
Synonyms for:
soldiered = spent, passed, fought, defended
turf = cover, soil, land
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