Writeacher, (Mrs,Mr)

Sorry I don't know which is correct.
You are helping me so much ; Thank you greatly...

I have taken your advise and made more changes to my answers. I never see my mistakes until you make your suggestions. I guess that's why my instructor say it is good to have someone else to proof read your work.

My changes are .

Question # 1.

I believe the type of visuals most appropriate for my topic are bar graphs that will provide information showing the amount of money spent on illegal drugs each year from one time period to another.

Question 2.

These visuals will fit most effectively near the argument that directly represent the visual. By placing these visuals near the arguments that states a lot of money is made among gang violence, I believe these visuals will support and strengthen my argument by allowing me to clearly present information to the audience as well help capture the audiences attention.

Question # 1.

I believe the type of visuals most appropriate for my topic are bar graphs that will provide information showing the amount of money spent on illegal drugs each year from one time period to another.
Excellent. Nice and detailed!

Question 2.

These visuals will fit most effectively near the argument that directly represent the visual. By placing these visuals near the arguments that states a lot of money is made among gang violence, I believe these visuals will support and strengthen my argument by allowing me to clearly present information to the audience as well help capture the audiences attention.
Much, much better! Just a few grammatical corrections:

"...near the arguments that state the incredible amounts of money that result from gang violence,..."

"...audience, as well..."

"...audience's attention."