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does this paragraph sound OK?
but when it comes to security it may be a problem.

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asked by tinker
  1. That's not a paragraph.

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  2. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/606/01/
    Be sure to read all of this, including the section called Adequate Development.

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  3. On your phrase, it is quite unclear what "it" means.

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