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Various people believe that the building of an Empire provides secure natural resources from taking over territories claimed by other countries. This Ultra-Nationalism can actually begin a war from attempts trying to take over another country, meaning that you will lose additional resources while the country is at war. One example of how building an Empire can result in a war was Germany's attempt to take over Europe. Nazi Germany started to build an Empire in their attempt to claim power over the world. After Germany invaded Poland, both France and Britain declared war on Germany. Many people died and resources were lost on both sides of this war. Another example of how the building of an empire leads to war is the Japanese expansion into S.E Asia. Due to a high population density, Japan needed more land and natural resources. Japan’s thirst for these resources led it to build an empire. By expanding, Japan started a war with many countries like China. After several years, Japan conquered most of these Pacific countries, but lost its entire empire, the natural resources it was expanding for and many lives when it was attacked by atomic bombs sent by the U.S.A. This concludes that by building an empire, a country is portraying a signal for war.

Various people who? believe that the building of an Empire provides for whom? secure natural resources from taking over territories claimed by other countries. This Ultra-Nationalism can actually begin a war from attempts trying to take over another country, meaning that you will lose additional resources while the country is at war. One example of how building an Empire can result in a war was Germany's attempt to take over Europe. Nazi Germany started to build an Empire in their attempt to claim power over the world. After Germany invaded Poland, both France and Britain declared war on Germany. Many people died and resources were lost on both sides of this war. Another example of how the building of an empire leads to war is the Japanese expansion into S.E Asia. Due to a high population density, Japan needed more land and natural resources. Japan’s thirst for these resources led it to build an empire. By expanding, Japan started a war with many countries like China. After several years, Japan conquered most of these Pacific countries, but lost its entire empire, the natural resources it was expanding for and many lives when it was attacked by atomic bombs sent by the U.S.A. This concludes that by building an empire, a country is portraying a signal for war.

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Many believe that building an empire allows a nation to secure natural resources by taking over territories claimed by other countries. However, this pursuit of ultra-nationalism can actually lead to war, resulting in the loss of additional resources for the country involved. One historical example of how building an empire can lead to war is Germany's attempt to dominate Europe. Nazi Germany sought to expand its power and influence, but its invasion of Poland sparked a declaration of war by France and Britain. This conflict cost numerous lives and depleted resources on both sides.

Another illustrative example is Japan's expansion into Southeast Asia. Encumbered by a high population density, Japan sought additional land and resources. Its pursuit of these resources led to the establishment of an empire. However, Japan's expansion ignited a war with various countries, including China. While Japan managed to conquer many Pacific nations, it ultimately lost its entire empire, the very resources it sought, and countless lives when the U.S.A. dropped atomic bombs.

In conclusion, the act of building an empire often serves as a precursor to war. While the initial intention may be to secure resources, this pursuit can escalate conflicts and result in significant losses of both resources and human lives.