I created my resume, however my profile paragraph seems a little too wordy any ideas or thoughts on how I can change/improve it?
PROFILE:
Seeking an intern or entry position in Project Management where I can develop and excel while giving my best to an employer. Although I have extensive experience in dealing with customers and other individuals, I have a great deal of ambition, love to learn, and am always up to any challenge that may approach me. I am loyal, dedicated, extensively organized, a fast learner, work well under pressure, and have proven excellence in leadership skills. In addition I get along well with others, while also working efficiently on my own.
EDUCATION
Bachelor of Business Administration
October 2008 – November 2008
American InterContinental University
Concentration: Project Management
GPA: N/A
Associate of Business Administration
August 2006 – September 2007
American InterContinental University
Concentration: Business Arts
GPA: 3.93
Accomplishments: Dean's list every semester, Great leadership skills: Group leader in AIU for 16 group projects, 15 out of 16 received an outstanding A+; the other one received a B.
Clubs: Management, Entrepreneurship, Workplace Learning Training & Development, IT Professionals
Education Goals & Objectives
Currently seeking a Bachelors degree in Project Management, plans to continue include an Advanced Six Sigma Master’s Degree from Villanova University following by a Master’s Degree in Business Administration concentrating in Project Management.
WORK HISTORY:
Receptionist
May 2007 – Present
Dr. Chengot (Amityville Heart Center)
Amityville, NY
- Received phone calls, determined nature of calls and assisted them
- Successfully arranged appointments between patients and doctors
- Responsible for taking messages, delivering and replying
- Strong work ethic and superior interpersonal, customer service and communication skills
- Excellent time management skills that allow for the multi-tasking of all responsibilities
- Billed patients with diagnosis codes
- Filed Charts and paperwork in the correct location
Accomplishments: Reorganized files in first month
Sales Associate
October 2003 – January 2004
Baker’s Footwear
Massapequa, NY
- Sold merchandise to customers.
- Informed customers on promotional items to increase sales.
- Organized merchandise by size and type.
- Kept up with cleaning.
- Provided great customer service.
- Closed store, prepared closing paperwork, closed out cashier.
Accomplishments: Increased sales by 2%
Sales Associate/Photographer
September 2005 – May 2007
CPI – Sears Portrait Studio
Massapequa, NY
- Photographing individuals, preparing the scene, placing the camera in adequate position.
- Selling merchandise, and upgrading sales therefore creating a larger profit for CPI.
- Preparing pictures for pick up, and selling additional merchandise at closing of sale.
- Always exceeded in customer service by making sure each customer left happy.
- Outreach (calling customers) was performed to increase customers, as well as profits.
- Opening and closing the store, cashing out, as well as required closing paperwork.
- Kept up with cleaning, and other store requirements.
- Worked with Adobe Photoshop.
Accomplishments: Proven excellence in customer service rating 98.7%, Kept above company standards with average sales of $118 per customer.
Cashier
June 2001 – January 2005
McDonald’s
Lindenhurst, NY
- Greeted customers making them feel welcome.
- Took orders and presented them in the correct order.
- Clean all messes which needed attention
- In addition, also worked with drive-thru, and food preparation
- Assisted in opening and closing the store
SKILLS & ACHIEVEMENTS
- Computer Skills: Microsoft Office (Word, Excel, Outlook & PowerPoint), Adobe Photoshop, Windows XP, MAC.
- Excellent mathematical skills in logic and algebra.
- Committed to community service. Extensive volunteer history including involvement with local church, ADHD and problem children, worked with needy children.
- Organizes and maintains a 4.5/5 star local children’s online playgroup where parents and children get together for organized events such as parks, local areas, homes, and mother night outs without the children
Also I have a cover letter if someone wouldn't mind giving me their ideas on it.
P.S. The last sentence with "Organizes" might be better in the past tense: "Organized" as the rest of the items are.
To improve your profile paragraph on your resume, it's important to make it concise, focused, and impactful. Here's a suggested revision:
"Motivated and ambitious professional seeking an intern or entry-level position in Project Management. Experience in customer relations, coupled with a passion for learning and a proactive approach to challenges. Excel in organization, adaptability, and leadership skills. Effective at collaborating with others while also thriving in independent work environments."
This revised paragraph maintains the key information about your goals, qualities, and skills while eliminating excessive wording. It presents a clear and straightforward introduction to grab the attention of potential employers.
Moving on to your cover letter, please share the content so that I can assist you with suggestions to improve it.