I'm sure that this paragraph is better than the last one. I did it in english version as well. Please make any corrections, and I'm sorry for having you check this again. I really appreciate all your effort and time Sra.

Mon arbre de Noël de famille est dans ma grande salle de séjour et il a des tonnes de cadeaux sous. J'ai aidé à le décorer avec ma mère et les frères. Nous avons décoré notre arbre de Noël avec différents types d'ornements, tels que des anges, des bonhommes de neige, flocons de neige, étoiles, et ainsi de suite. Ma sœur et mes frères ont fait leurs propres aussi bien; les ornements qu'ils ont créés sont très brillants et élégants. Nous également avons mis dessus les lumières de Noël et cette guirlande scintillante molle et blanche autour l'arbre de Noël. The garland really stands out on our christmas tree; c'est une bonne chose pour la mettre dessus pour combler les lacunes entre les branches. Ce week-end je vais aider mon père à placer la grande étoile que nous avons juste achetée, sur notre arbre de Noël. Je vais également acheter couple de cadeaux pour ma famille et placer sous l’arbre aussi. Nos regards d'arbre de Noël très beau et pour le faire regarder mieux, mes parents peuvent aller faire des emplettes cette semaine, pour acheter plus de fantaisie regardant des ornements. Les ornements cet d’l amour vraiment sont des ornements d'instrument ; ils font notre musical de regard d'arbre de Noël. En outre, les lumières d'arbre de Noël que nous avons sont les musicales. Bien, je souhais tout le monde un Joyeux Noël et Bonne Année.
In English version this is what I wanted to say:
: My family Christmas tree is in my big living room and it has tons of presents underneath. I helped decorate it with my mom and siblings. We decorated our Christmas tree with different types of ornaments which were, snowmen, snowflakes, stars, and so on. My siblings made some of their own as well, the ornaments that they have created are very shiny and elegant. We also put on Christmas lights and this soft, white, sparkly garland around the tree. The garland really stands out on our Christmas tree; it’s a good thing to put on it to fill the gaps between the branches. This weekend I am going to help my dad place the big star we just bought, on our Christmas tree. I am also going to buy a couple of presents for my family and place them under the tree as well. Our Christmas tree looks really pretty and to make it look even better my parents may go shopping this week, to buy more fancy looking ornaments. The ornaments which I really like are instrument ornaments; they make our Christmas tree look musical. Also, the Christmas tree lights that we have are musical ones. Well, I hope everyone has a wonderful Christmas and a happy new year.

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  1. It's too long for my eyes to scan up and down, up and down, so I'm printing it out and I'll get back to you later. I suggest you do NOT wait up as it will be late.

    Sra (aka Mme)

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  2. not sous (which is a preposition) but dessous (adverb)

    de différentes types d'ornements

    des flocons, des étoiles

    Nous avons mis également OR Également nous avons mis

    autour de l'arbre

    fNOt dessus but dessous

    nous venons d'acheter

    un couple de les placer...

    Notre arabre est très beau et pour le faire mieux...

    pour acheter plus d'ornements ornementaux

    Les ornements qu j'aime... (drop "de regard d'arbre de Noël

    ils font notre arbre musical

    qu e nous avons so nt musicales

    Sra (aka Mme)

    Un Joyeux Noël et une Bonne Année à vous aussi, Anna!

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