Can you please check the grammar in these two separate points. Thank you.
Irene shares with Clare how her daughter would be affected if John found out about his own wifes “true race” and reveals to Clare would could happen.
The lesson that Larson is trying to teach to her readers is that if they do not agree with the way people identify their race, let things be because racial tension will occur and the ending results may not be good for either person.
wife's
teach her readers (omit "to")
Irene shares with Clare how her daughter would be affected if John found out about his own wifes “true race” and reveals to Clare would could happen.
wife's <~~it's possessive
Why is "true race" in quotation marks? Whom are you quoting? Why is there no citation? (And if you're not quoting anyone, get rid of the quotation marks.)
The sentence is quite long; it would be better to divide it into two sentences.
The lesson that Larson is trying to teach to her readers is that if they do not agree with the way people identify their race, let things be because racial tension will occur and the ending results may not be good for either person.
comma after "if"
"they should" before "let things"
delete "ending" -- it's redundant
This is also a long sentence and should be divided.
Sure, I can help you check the grammar in these two separate points.
Point 1:
"Irene shares with Clare how her daughter would be affected if John found out about his own wife's 'true race' and reveals to Clare what could happen."
Explanation:
- The possessive form of "wife" should be used, so it should be "his own wife's" instead of "his own wifes."
- "Reveals to Clare would could happen" should be rephrased as "and reveals to Clare what could happen." This makes the sentence clearer and more grammatically correct.
Point 2:
"The lesson that Larson is trying to teach her readers is that if they do not agree with the way people identify their race, they should let things be because racial tension will occur, and the end results may not be good for either person."
Explanation:
- "The lesson that Larson is trying to teach to her readers" is grammatically correct, and the use of the verb "teach" is appropriate.
- "If they do not agree with the way people identify their race" is grammatically correct and conveys the intended meaning.
- "Let things be" is clear and concise, indicating that one should not interfere or try to change someone's racial identity.
- "Because racial tension will occur" specifies the reason why one should let things be, and it is grammatically correct.
- "And the ending results may not be good for either person" is a clearer and grammatically correct way to convey the idea that the outcome may be negative for both individuals involved.
By making these revisions, the grammar in both points has been improved.