Can you please tell me what is wrong with this sentence. My teacher underlined it on my paper. What should it say. Thank You
Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage. Jackson's supporters felt like white men should be allowed to vote.
I read somewhere, that Andrew Jackson wanted ALL white men to vote, not just upper-class ones.
So, if that is true, then your sentence should have read: Jackson's supporters felt like all white men should be allowed to vote.
It's two sentences, but anyway ...
The Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage. Jackson's supporters felt that white men should be allowed to vote.
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Scroll down and read about the usage problem with this word as a conjunction.
In addition, you need to clarify what you're saying. Jackson was for universal suffrage for white men. Before that, only white men who were also property owners could vote. What you've written is incomplete and misleading.
Should I take out the first part Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage.
I would switch the two sentences and clarify the second.
Or remove the first and vastly clarify the second.
I'm confused.... so in simplier terms what should I be saying? I don't get it?
I really don't understand what you mean. I thought that one of Jackson's principles was expanded suffrage which allowed all white men to vote. I honestly don't get what you mean please help.
Expanded suffrage, yes -- to all white men instead of just white men who owned property. And remember that "white men" meant exactly that -- not including women, not including others who were born in the US but who were not white.
In your statement, you need to clarify what was (white men who owned property could vote) and what he wanted (all white men to be able to vote). Be sure not to call it "universal suffrage," however.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jacksonian_democracy
Thank you. I get it now.
You're very welcome!
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The issue with the sentence is that it includes the repetitive phrase "Jackson's supporters felt like." To improve the sentence, you can remove the repetition and rephrase it in a more concise and clear manner. Here's a suggested revision:
"The Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage, which advocated for the inclusion of white men in the voting process."