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We all have been through some difficult times in our lives. Some of the times might not have been as bad as others, but we still can help others by giving our advices about what they should and shouldn't do. I have had some really tough times in my life, but I continued to press through those times because I realized that it would be some brighter days ahead.
To begin with,we all can help others that we know are going through difficult times by giving them encouraging words. Sometimes, all people need to know is that someone is thinking about them and that they are not alone. Many times,people have difficult times because they don't have the money to pay bills, or they tries to keep up with someone else and put themselves in a bin.
Next, I would advise them to pray about the problem. When we pray something have to change because we are God children. Often time, we just worry and start complaining to others, but the key thing is to pray about the situation. My next advice for them would be to hang around some positive people that is going to bring their spirit up and not make matters worst. You could even go somewhere you normal wouldn't go to forget about the hard times that you are having.
In conclusion, we all have had rough times in our lives. We can help a person that is trying to overcome a difficult time in so many ways. There are some people that is just gifted with being able to help someone else overcome depression. I have had difficult times in my life, but I realized that there was no need for me to be depressed or feel alone because I knew that there would be some better days.
What is the wording of the assignment you were given?
Who are "we"? Why are you inconsistent in using "we" and "I"?
"advice" (no plural form for this word)
In line 4, what is "it"?
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Please go over your paper with the following in mind. Thanks to PsyDAG for the following:
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http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/proofing.htm
Once you have gone over your paper again, following the directions above, I'll be happy to check it. I didn't get past the first paragraph this time.
Ck:And list errors that need to be correct
What advices would you give a person who was trying to overcome difficult times?
Everyone have been through some difficult times in their lives. Some of the times might not have been as bad as others, but we still can help others by giving our advice about what they should and shouldn't do. I have had some really tough times in my life, but I continued to press through those times because I realized that my days wouldn't always be difficult, but I would have some brighter days ahead.
To begin with,we can help others that we know are going through difficult times by giving them encouraging words. Sometimes, all people need to know is that someone is thinking about them and that they are not alone. Many times,people have difficult times because they don't have the money to pay bills, or they tries to keep up with someone else and put themselves in a bin.
Next, I would advise them to pray about the problem. When we pray something have to change because we are God children. Often time, we just worry and start complaining to others, but the key thing is to pray about the situation. My next advice for them would be to hang around some positive people that is going to uplift their spirit and not make matters worst.
In conclusion, everyone have had rough times in our lives. We can help a person that is trying to overcome a difficult time in so many ways. There are some people that is just gifted with being able to help someone else overcome depression. I have had difficult times in my life, but I realized that there were no need for me to be depressed or feel alone because I knew that there would be some better days.
Everyone has been through hard times in their lives. Some of the times might not have been as bad as others, but we can still help by giving our advice to those who are going through such moments. We could help them by giving them advice on what they should, and or shouldn't do. Our help could probably give them the courage to make right decisions and reduce others pains. Our help could also encourage them to be brave and face such situations, yet to arrive. I have had several tough times in my life, but I continued to press through them because I realized that they would end very soon. I knew that my brighter days would arrive very soon. Sometimes, all that people need to know is that someone is thinking about them and that they are not alone. Many times, people have tricky times because they don't have the money to pay bills, or they try to keep up with the wrong person and end up putting themselves in a bin. The best way to get out of such situations is to keep calm and quiet. Share your feelings with someone, and lessen the pain you're going through.
I have gone through your first paragraph, and have corrected things that seemed unsuitable to me. If I have missed out on anything then please let me know.
Next, I would advise them to do some meditation. Usually that is the only way to make your mind calm, when it's burning. You have to pray with a true heart, to make god listen. Usually, we just worry and start complaining to others, but the key thing is to pray about the situation. My next advice for them would be to hang around some positive people that is going to uplift their spirit and not make matters worst.
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Here are some errors that need to be corrected in the given passage:
1. "but we still can help others by giving our advices" should be corrected to "but we can still help others by giving our advice."
2. "I have had some really tough times in my life" should be corrected to "I have had some really tough times in my life."
3. "because they don't have the money to pay bills" should be corrected to "because they don't have the money to pay their bills."
4. "tries to keep up with someone else and put themselves in a bin" should be corrected to "try to keep up with someone else and put themselves in a bind."
5. "When we pray something have to change" should be corrected to "When we pray, something has to change."
6. "but the key thing is to pray about the situation" could be rephrased as "but the most important thing is to pray about the situation."
7. "that is going to bring their spirit up and not make matters worst" should be corrected to "that is going to lift their spirits and not make matters worse."
8. "You could even go somewhere you normal wouldn't go" should be corrected to "You could even go somewhere you wouldn't normally go."
9. "There are some people that is just gifted" should be corrected to "There are some people who are just gifted."
10. "I have had difficult times in my life, but I realized that there was no need for me to be depressed or feel alone because I knew that there would be some better days" should be corrected to "I have had difficult times in my life, but I realized that there was no need for me to be depressed or feel alone because I knew that there would be better days."
To improve the overall readability of the passage, it would be helpful to revise the sentence structures and make them more concise. Additionally, it would be beneficial to proofread for any punctuation and grammatical errors.