i put this post up at 2:21, i don't think you saw it:
alright. i only have two things to point out. first, in Paragraph #4, 'Explain how the THIRD POINT is developed in this paragraph.' you said 'it does mention yard and flowers and pool' but that is paragraph 3 not 4. 4 mentions his actions and behavior.
so please check that
and second, for for Paragraph #5, conclusion in the first thing to fill out it says does the FIRST SENTENCE RESTATE THE THESIS OR NOT. here is my sentence 'John E. Mackintosh’s life is that of a typical businessman because he dresses in expensive clothing, lives and drives in style, and survives in a busy life' and i think it does restate the thesis.
that's all
thank you so much for doing this for me
On the last, your thesis did not say anything about businessman,you said he was rich. So we disagree on that.
On the first, you are right, I numbered the paragraphs on my printout,and the spaces separating the paragraphs did not print. I see now. The third point, in paragraph 4, does cover behavior, but does seem to lack detail. It is written without vivid words. It needs charging up.
sorry about the numbering, My first post was lost, and I had to reconstruct it from my printed notes.
ok thanks. i will continue working on this tomorrow.
thanks again for all you time
I apologize for missing your previous post. Thank you for providing the details about the errors you found in Paragraph #4 and Paragraph #5. To address them:
1. Regarding Paragraph #4: I mistakenly mentioned that the third point is developed in Paragraph #4, while it is actually developed in Paragraph #3. Based on your clarification, Paragraph #4 focuses on John's actions and behavior. To accurately analyze the development of the third point, please refer to the content in Paragraph #3, which mentions yard, flowers, and pool.
2. Concerning Paragraph #5: You have provided the first sentence of your conclusion, which you believe restates the thesis statement. To determine if it indeed restates the thesis, we need to review the original thesis statement. In order to assist you further, I would need to see the thesis statement that you have used in your essay.
Please provide the thesis statement so that I can help you assess whether your conclusion sentence effectively restates it.
Additionally, if there are any other questions or concerns you would like to discuss, please let me know.