My previous post didn't post properly so heres a new one.
Can someone please check my work?
James:But we’re so good together,
Susan:We were good together. I’m sorry, but I think we should break up.
James:(Silence)
Susan:James?
James:You think we should break up. (Sighs) I understand your feelings for me have changed. I guess I’m going to have to accept the fact that you don’t want to be with me anymore, so I guess….we break up.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>Awkward Silence<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<
Jason:(Suddenly walks over) What’s up?
Jason:Looks at James and Susan as they remain silent) Something wrong?
James:We broke up.
Jason:Oh……. (Silence)
Jason:Well, no worries. (Puts his arms around them and pulls them close) Don’t let a messy relationship mess up our friendship. We will always be friends. Hey, why don’t the three of us catch a movie tonight? (James and Susan smile.)
The is the ending part of my assertive communication script. And I find that the ending doesn't sound realistic.
Can someone suggest any ideas on how I can make this more realistic?
Thank You.
I think James might tell Jason that he's busy and walks off. Then Susan might just smile, grab Jason's arm and says something like, I'd love to, then bat her eyelashes at him....
To make the ending of your assertive communication script sound more realistic, you could consider the following suggestions:
1. Add some dialogue to address the emotions and thoughts of James and Susan after the breakup. This could involve them expressing their sadness, disappointment, or any conflicting feelings they might have.
2. Allow James and Susan to have a conversation about their decision to remain friends. They could discuss their expectations, boundaries, and how they plan to navigate their friendship considering the recent breakup.
3. Instead of Jason immediately proposing to go to the movies, you could have him acknowledge the situation and offer his support. This could involve him saying something like, "I know this must be tough for both of you. Just remember, I'm here for you, no matter what. Let's take some time to process this, and when you're ready, we could do something together to lift your spirits."
4. Consider including a discussion about taking some space and time apart to heal before jumping straight into a movie night. This would reflect a more realistic approach to post-breakup dynamics and allow the characters to take care of themselves emotionally.
Remember, in order to make the ending more realistic, it's important to focus on the characters' emotional journey and reflect the complexities that come with the end of a relationship.