Are there any improvments I can make in this paragraph? also i need a word for the place where there is a ----. i can't seem to find a word to put in there:
This is a new concept, designed specifically for gaming.
It was designed so it could allow people to interact without the ordinary input devices such as a keyboard, mouse etc.
There are two touch screen surfaces and a reclining function for comfort --- interacting with the device.
The screen is 18 inches wide, and it turns transparent when not in use.
This device offers relaxation and comfort while playing games, also with that futuristic look.
Thanks
-MC
while?
Thanks
-MC
But is the paragraph OK?
Can i make any improvements or corrections?
-MC
It looks good -- you've described it well. The only thing I'm not clear about is if a reclining chair is part of the device.
MC... What does the "This" refer to? Put the name of the object there instead of 'this".
Instead of "so it could allow" use "to allow".
This sentence is really awkward....
There are two touch screen surfaces and a reclining function for comfort --- interacting with the device...
I would put a period after comfort.
This futuristically designed device offers relaxation and comfort while playing games.
I put this there because it's a powerpoint.
You put the last sentence really good. Thanks
-MC
This is a new concept, specifically designed for gaming, aimed at revolutionizing the way people interact with games. However, there are a few improvements that can be made to enhance the paragraph:
This is a new gaming concept that has been carefully crafted to cater to gamers' needs.
It was meticulously designed to enable seamless interaction without the need for conventional input devices such as keyboards or mice.
There are two interactive touch screen surfaces, accompanied by a reclining function that ensures optimal comfort while interacting with the device.
The screen boasts a width of 18 inches and adopts a transparent feature when not in use.
This innovative device provides unparalleled relaxation and comfort during gaming sessions, all while boasting a sleek and futuristic appearance.
Regarding the blank space, it seems like you are looking for a specific word to describe the place where the device is used. "Setup" or "gaming station" could be suitable options. However, to provide a more accurate suggestion, it would be helpful to know the context or purpose of the word you are seeking.