I had to write two poem and i need someone to look over it for me with the direction i had to use to make sure that i did my assignment right please. Here is the direction : Write two (2) poems, each of which is from 10 to 30 lines. Idioms, cliches, and dead metaphors are to be avoided. Density must be considered and evident in the final draft. Point of view is consistent, whether first or third person. Second person (you) must be avoided. Choose from the following possibilities, using a different choice for each of your two poems. Please include the name of your choice with each poem:

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I had to write two poem and i need someone to look over it for me with the direction i had to use to make sure that i did my assignment right please. Here is the direction : Write two (2) poems, each of which is from 10 to 30 lines. Idioms, cliches, and dead metaphors are to be avoided. Density must be considered and evident in the final draft. Point of view is consistent, whether first or third person. Second person (you) must be avoided. Choose from the following possibilities, using a different choice for each of your two poems. Please include the name of your choice with each poem:

* A poem that uses free verse with concrete images that employ at least 3 of 5 senses (sight, sound, taste, touch, and/or smell). Balance concrete images throughout the poem, without concentrating them in one place.

* A poem focused on use of sound devices, such as rhyme, assonance, and/or alliteration, along with concrete images that employ at least 3 of 5 senses (sight, sound, taste, touch, and/or smell). Sound must be used clearly to add to the effects of the poem. Balance concrete images throughout the poem, without concentrating them in one place.
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A poem that extends a metaphor as a conceit throughout the poem. This poem will also use concrete images that employ at least 3 of 5 senses (sight, sound, taste, touch, and/or smell), balanced throughout the poem, without concentrating them in one place.
* A poem that uses doubleness, such as puns, paradoxes, and/or oxymorons. This poem will also use concrete images that employ at least 3 of 5 senses (sight, sound, taste, touch, and/or smell), balanced throughout the poem, without concentrating them in one place.

Here is my two poem please:
Alliteration
Ocean
The sand covers her like a blanket, she smoothes out the wrinkles
The breeze taps her shoulder with the salutation of an old friend
The sun’s warmth radiates her soul once again
She is home
And the ocean waves shimmer their cerulean hue
As the golden light touches the surface, an oceanic symphony drums her ears
The water is singing her name
With outstretched legs, she leans back on her arms and closes her eyes
Once again, she can unwind
This is her comfort
This is her peace
Welcome home, my dear.

Doubleness
About Your “Love”
Why do you say you love me?
Do not “count the ways.”
Love is a knave, a jester that taunts me, and a trick for which I’d prefer not to fall to.
Love is not a rose, nor a violet.
Try not to blame love and say it is blind. Love never had eyes.
You don’t know love.
It doesn’t know you.
You are starved for fruitful passion. And I am a drought and a barren field.
I will not give in because your red roses salivate sweet scents.
I will not let you “swear by the moon” when tomorrow you could be gone.
Your eyes convince and your smile alludes to adoration.
But do not make a promise that will float alone in the sky, only to join the sun that you say I am.
I am towering over you on this pedestal.
I’d much rather be on the ground.
Please, oh please, can I come down?

Answer 1

Be sure you write "two poems" (plural) rather than two poem.

Sra

Answer 2

Okay I make sure but can you tell me how I did with the assignment

Answer 3

Sure, I'd be happy to look over your poems for you! Let's go through each poem and provide feedback based on the given directions:

Poem 1: "Ocean"
This poem seems to fulfill the requirement of using concrete images that employ at least 3 of the 5 senses. The descriptions of the sand covering like a blanket, the breeze tapping the shoulder, and the sun's warmth radiating the soul are vivid and engaging. The poem also balances the concrete images throughout without concentrating them in one place. Overall, it seems to meet the requirements.

Poem 2: "About Your 'Love'"
This poem effectively incorporates doubleness in the form of puns, paradoxes, and oxymorons. The lines like "Love is not a rose, nor a violet" and "You are starved for fruitful passion. And I am a drought and a barren field" demonstrate this well. It also includes concrete images that engage the senses, along with the other requirements. The poem successfully balances these elements throughout.

In conclusion, both poems seem to meet the given directions and fulfill the requirements set for each option. Well done on creating these poems! If you have any specific questions or areas you would like feedback on, please let me know.