does this sentence make sense? how can I make it better?

A man determined to find love through the internet finds out that love is staring him in the face the whole time.Thanks

How about this?

Determined to find love through the Internet, a man finds that love is staring him in the face the whole time.

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The point is to keep the subject (man) and the main verb (finds) as close together as possible.

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Yes, the revised sentence makes sense and is grammatically correct. By moving the introductory phrase "Determined to find love through the Internet" closer to the subject "a man," the sentence flows more smoothly and is easier to understand. Keeping the subject and the main verb together helps to improve clarity and readability. Thus, the revised sentence is an improvement over the original sentence.