English Thesis

I am usnure about my restated Thesis for my conclusion paragraph. But here is my first thesis

1. King Duncan, King Hamlet, Malcolm and Fortinbras are all minor characters who play an essential role in each tragedy; the kings are both murdered and the young men are both fighting for their father’s lands in the end.

Here is the restated thesis

2.King Duncan, King Hamlet, Malcolm and Fortinbras may be minor characters, but they are valuable in their roles in helping to move the plot along.

The first one is more "telling" about what to expect in the rest of your paper, and that's what a thesis statement should do.

One change I'd make -- "who play essential roles" -- plural not singular, since you are writing about four characters.

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Thanks for the help again, I think I get it now!

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