is this a good introduction. please let me know if ther is anything wrong with it.thank you.
Although Juliet’s suitors Paris and Romeo are very similar on the outside, their thoughts and feelings are very different. Throughout “Romeo and Juliet” they are often compared. Romeo and Paris have differences as well as similarities. The most important difference is the way and the reason of their love for Juliet. This essay will discuss both the similarities and differences of these young guys.
thanks this is enough. sorry anout not being patient. i was in a hurry.
Ms. Sue is absolutely right about the different sentences in what you posted.
The 2nd and 3rd sentences simply repeat the 1st sentence, but in different words. Dump them.
Expand on that 4th sentence, and dump the last sentence ... but also remember what you wrote in your thesis. From that thesis (which would be better placed at the END of the intro paragraph), I expect to find at least one section of your paper explaining how Paris and Romeo are similar on the outside, as well as the majority of your paper stating and explaining the major ways they are different in their thinking and their emotions.
thanks for all the help
You're welcome.
This introduction appears to be a good start for an essay on the similarities and differences between Paris and Romeo in "Romeo and Juliet." However, there are a couple of suggestions to improve it:
1. Provide context: You could start by briefly introducing the play itself, particularly focusing on the central theme of love and the characters involved.
2. Clear thesis statement: It could be helpful to explicitly state what the main argument or purpose of the essay will be. This will give the reader a clear expectation of what to expect in the subsequent paragraphs.
Here's a revised version that incorporates these suggestions:
"In Shakespeare's tragic play 'Romeo and Juliet,' the characters of Paris and Romeo share certain similarities, drawing comparisons throughout the story. However, their thoughts, feelings, and motivations diverge significantly, particularly in their approaches to love. This essay will explore both the commonalities and distinctions between these two young suitors, shedding light on their contrasting perspectives and the impact they have on Juliet's destiny."
Remember, this is just a suggestion, and you can modify it according to your own writing style and the requirements of your essay.
Since you chose not to be patient, I'll throw in my opinion -- which may not be the same as our experts in high school essays.
Your first sentence is good. The next two say nothing.
You should expand on your fourth sentence.
Your last sentence is unnecessary and juvenile. The readers should know from your introduction what your paper is about. You don't need to tell them.
Also -- using slang, like "guys" is not acceptable in a formal essay.