Background
Your favorite cousin has moved to your town and is looking for a job. Her previous experiences are
working as a cashier and sales clerk at two department stores. You know she plans to apply at similar
stores in your town. But you also know she is a perfect match for a job opening as a reliable assistant
to your boss. You know she has the skills, though she doesn’t think she is as capable as she is, and
you’re sure she’d be good at this job.
Your goal is to persuade your cousin to apply for the job. You e-mail her a paragraph explaining the
specifics of the job and the reasons she should apply. You want to convince her that she has the job
skills required. You’ll use an informal tone, of course, but will take care to use correct business writing
to show her that you take your recommendation seriously.
Process
1. Using your imagination, create the kind of skills the job as boss’s assistant requires. Make up
names for your boss and the company, as well as any facts that might help you prove your case
to your cousin. Freewrite about the skills you’ve seen her show in other settings and about how
you can convince her to use those abilities in this position. In addition, consider personality traits
that show she would work well with your boss. Also make up details and figures about how this
job will benefit your cousin personally and professionally.
2. Circle the information your cousin most needs to hear to be persuaded to apply for this job. You
won’t be able to use everything you made up. Organize the details and explanation using an order of importance pattern.
Have I done this correctly?
Dear Tiffany,
I became ecstatic when I discovered you were back in town, and looking for work. My boss, Hack Ayers is currently seeking an assistant. He is the owner and operator of Ayers Bank Real Estate. I feel you should defiantly apply for this position. The skills required for the position are, answering phone calls, taking messages, setting up appointments, and occasionally scheduling business meetings. You were always open to new experiences, compassionate, exceptional in character, and extremely good at multi-tasking. It would be gratifying to have you on our team.
All the best,
Amanda Honeycutt
This looks pretty good -- EXCEPT --
I hope your cousin doesn't defiantly apply for this position! With that kind of attitude, she wouldn't ever get an interview.
You might also point out that she has excellent people skills, and your boss would consider her a real asset to the company.
Do I need a comma between company and because? Do you think this will finish my paragragh?
Dear Tiffany,
I became ecstatic when I discovered you were back in town, and looking for work. My boss, Hack Ayers is currently seeking an assistant. He is the owner and operator of Ayers Bank Real Estate. I feel you should definitely apply for this position. The skills required for the position are, answering phone calls, taking messages, setting up appointments, and occasionally scheduling business meetings. Mr. Ayers would consider you a real asset to the company because of your excellent people skills. You were always open to new experiences, compassionate, exceptional in character, and extremely good at multi-tasking. It would be gratifying to have you on our team
Ahh -- much better! :-)
No, you don't need a comma between company and because.
Thanks!!
You're welcome.
iam having a test for tomorrow about how to write a paragraph, and i need help because i don't know how to start.
Dear Tiffany,
I was so excited to hear that you are back in town and looking for work. I wanted to let you know about a great job opportunity that I think you would be perfect for. My boss, Hack Ayers, is currently in need of an assistant at Ayers Bank Real Estate. I truly believe that you should apply for this position, as I know that you have the skills and qualities that would make you an excellent fit for the job.
As an assistant to Hack, you would be responsible for a variety of tasks such as answering phone calls, taking messages, scheduling appointments, and occasionally arranging business meetings. Your experience as a cashier and sales clerk at department stores has given you valuable skills in customer service, organization, and time management. These skills will directly translate to the assistant role, making you a strong candidate.
Additionally, I know you to be a compassionate and reliable person, always willing to go the extra mile to help others. These traits are highly valued in a professional setting, especially when working closely with someone like Hack. Your exceptional character and ability to multitask will surely make you an asset to our team.
Not only would this job be a great opportunity for you in terms of gaining experience and developing new skills, but it also has the potential for personal and professional growth. Working alongside Hack, who is a well-respected figure in the real estate industry, will provide you with valuable networking opportunities and insights into the business world. Furthermore, the position offers competitive compensation and benefits, providing stability and financial security.
Tiffany, I truly believe that this job is a perfect match for you. Your skills, personality, and work ethic make you an ideal candidate for the role of Hack's assistant. I encourage you to apply and showcase all that you have to offer. I will be more than happy to help you with the application process and provide any assistance you may need.
Best regards,
Amanda Honeycutt