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Can someone check to see if these are correct and give me some ideas
Rewrite the following sentences, focusing on the grammar area specified in the left column. To enter your answer, click next to the number and begin typing. If the sentence is already correct, write No Change.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
The directors and their wives met the stockholders for a night on the town.

Your answer:
1. The directors and their sponses met the stockholders for a night on the town

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
Each advisor was contacted by his students.

Your answer:
2.No change

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
The minister joined the couple together as man and wife.

Your answer:
3.The minister joined the couple together as husband and wife.
Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
She is a very capable black woman.

Your answer:
4.She's a very capable black woman.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
His grandmother really enjoys spending the afternoon at the center for senior citizens.

Your answer:
5.His grandmother enjoys spending the afternoon at the center for senior citizens.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
It’s hard to believe that a woman her age could accomplish so much.

Your answer:
6.It’s hard to believe a woman her age could accomplish so much.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
One of the high points of our trip was seeing the Canadian Eskimos in their traditional garb.

Your answer:
7. One of the highest points of our trip was seeing the Canadian Eskimos in their traditional garb.

Inclusive Language—Talking about People with Disabilities and Diseases
Her brother’s friend is an AIDS victim.

Your answer:
8.No change

Inclusive Language—Quoting from Biased Sources
The law from the 1800s mandated that men could buy alcohol and cigarettes only from a state store.

Your answer:
9. No change

Inclusive Language—Quoting from Biased Sources
The employee guide indicated that men could add their spouses to their health care plan.

Your answer:
10. The employee guide indicated that men could add their wives to their health care plan.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
The directors and their wives met the stockholders for a night on the town.

Your answer:
1. The directors and their spouses met the stockholders for a night on the town
correct (be sure to check spelling)

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
Each advisor was contacted by his students. Are all the advisors males?

Your answer:
2.No change ??

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonsexist
The minister joined the couple together as man and wife.

Your answer:
3.The minister joined the couple together as husband and wife.
correct; or simply "... joined the couple together"

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
She is a very capable black woman.

Your answer:
4.She's a very capable black woman.
How can you rephrase without using "black" and "woman"?

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
His grandmother really enjoys spending the afternoon at the center for senior citizens.

Your answer:
5.His grandmother enjoys spending the afternoon at the center for senior citizens.
Or maybe this: His grandmother really enjoys spending the afternoon at the center with her friends. But frankly, I don't see anything wrong with the original sentence. Senior centers are called just that on their own signs -- such as Joslyn Senior Center in Palm Springs, CA.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
It’s hard to believe that a woman her age could accomplish so much.

Your answer:
6.It’s hard to believe a woman her age could accomplish so much.
You need to rephrase without referring to her gender and age.

Inclusive Language—Making Language Nonracist and Nonagist
One of the high points of our trip was seeing the Canadian Eskimos in their traditional garb.

Your answer:
7. One of the highest points of our trip was seeing the Canadian Eskimos in their traditional garb.
The only thing I would change is to include the exact name of the people instead of the generic and inaccurate "Canadian Eskimos" -- http://www.workersforjesus.com/esk.htm

Inclusive Language—Talking about People with Disabilities and Diseases
Her brother’s friend is an AIDS victim.

Your answer:
8.No change
Rephrase without using the word "victim."

Inclusive Language—Quoting from Biased Sources
The law from the 1800s mandated that men could buy alcohol and cigarettes only from a state store.

Your answer:
9. No change
correct -- in the 1800s "men" was completely accurate; besides, if you're quoting, you must quote exactly as the original was written.

Inclusive Language—Quoting from Biased Sources
The employee guide indicated that men could add their spouses to their health care plan.

Your answer:
10. The employee guide indicated that men could add their wives to their health care plan.
What if the employee is a woman?

Let us know what further corrections you make, and someone here will give you more feedback.

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Your answers are very wrong, for the most part. Do the reading it's very simple and the assignment will be a breeze.

The blind people were downtown for a national conference.

Among those in attendance for a national conference downtown were visually impaired individuals.

you need to use people first language. the person comes first, then the disability

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    1a. I understand Dr. Maurice hired a new nurse. What is her name?
    1b. I understand Dr. Maurice hired a new nurse. What is his or her name

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  2. answer should be 1b

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