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Oh, Leonie, isn¡¯t it hard making contact with other people in this kind of place? Everyone¡¯s enjoying themselves but, I don¡¯t know, I feel it¡¯s a bit forced, do you fell that? Are you really enjoying yourself? Or are you only pretending. To please your husband, perhaps. (3.1)
This frustrating conversation led by Coral reminds the readers that she is being someone else. Furthermore, her odd behaviour in front of the others maddens her husband who warns Coral ¡°Well, You¡¯re even weirder than I thought if you think like that. It has to stop.¡± (2.3). Coral¡¯s grief is shown throughout the novel until she is ¡®away¡¯ from the everyday life.
Coral¡¯s remarkable transformation is because of her being ¡®away¡¯ from Roy; who can be described as a cage where Coral was caught in. Having away from her husband, Coral manage to express and live as herself without being disturbed. Her confidence of herself is vividly shown while she talks to Tom: ¡°I¡¯ll bet Kim Novak has more than an afternoon to get into a part¡± (4.3). She also overcomes her grief by talking to Tom, who also carries similar burden. Her concerns on Tom, ¡°You¡¯re not feeling¡¦ sick or anything? Tired?¡± (4.2) show that her true individuality has finally burst out to life. All these change could happen because Coral did not have to behave differently in front of her husband. Being away helped Coral to change not only her behaviour, but also find her true self.
Although Gwen and Coral¡¯s change was significant, Gwen¡¯s transformation was too dramatic and sudden, which can cause the readers to criticize Gow¡¯s play. Gwen behaviour could have changed while she was away with her family in the caravan park whereas she rather acted even more stubborn. Moreover, it was too absurd that Tom¡¯s illness affected Gwen a lot for her to change quickly. However being magical realism, the play enables the audience to understand the irregular alteration and other dramatic events occurred such as Coral¡¯s change help epiphany to be possible.
By going through a significant journey away from their home, Gwen and Coral experienced incredible transformation in both internally and mentally. This physical voyage which broke the daily routine and uneven lifestyle suggests that people should take a break and set themselves to a holiday or a vacation. It is uncertain but most likely that they might find their new identity in the natural world.
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
Thanks to PsyDAG for these ideas.
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You need to concentrate on prepositions and some punctuation -- when to use each particular ones correctly. Here's one example:
"...from Roy;<~~needs to be a comma, not a semicolon who can be described as a cage in which Coral was caught."
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1. Proofread your essay: Make sure to read through your essay multiple times to catch any grammatical errors or typos. You can also consider using grammar-checking tools or asking a friend to review your work.
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