please proofread this paragraph help me with TOPIC,DETAILS AND CONCLUDING SENTENCE? DOES IT HAVE ANY FRAGMENTS OR RUN-ONS DOES IT INCLUDE PRICE LOCATION ETC ?
Here are a few resturants you must visit on your vacation to Maui. If your looking for a very good meal at a price far below fancier resturants Paia Fish Market a great place for you to start. Paia Fish Market is known for a long line but well worth the wait, and they are also a great place to meet locals. Paia Fish Market is known for their great fish tacos! The next place i am sure you want to visit is the BigWave Café, they are known for Meatloaf Wensdays. The prices at Bigwave Café are a little more on the expensive side. The chef at bigwave café is world famous Raul Bermudez, and his main focus on menu is using fresh local seafood, and maui grown veggies and fruit. Now, if you are looking for the perfect romantic night out, try a dinner at Merriman’s. They have a great oceanfront location, and wonderfull views of the sunset. Although the price is very expensive and the portions are small, Merriman’s has great food and its beautifully presented! Maui’s restaurants are well worth eating at. ils
Your sentences have little errors, like the wrong usage of "your", in the first line, that would be "you're". And remember to capitalize your "I"'s and Wednesday is misspelled in the 5th sentence. Remember to capitalize restaurant/cafe names, and in the 3rd to last sentence, the word "wonderful" has an extra unnecessary "l" at the end. You might also want to lessen your usage of exclamation points. Hope that was helpful.
Beside the previous problems mentioned, new paragraphs indicate changes in ideas, places, times or persons.
Here are a few resturants you must visit on your vacation to Maui. If your looking for a very good meal at a price far below fancier restaurants (COMMA) Paia Fish Market a great place for you to start. Paia Fish Market is known for a long line (JUST ONE OR ONCE? NEED PLURAL.) but well worth the wait, and they are also a great place to meet locals. Paia Fish Market is known for their great fish tacos!
The next place i am sure you want to visit is the BigWave Café, they are known for Meatloaf Wensdays. The prices at Bigwave Café are a little more on the expensive side. The chef at bigwave café is world famous Raul Bermudez, and his main focus on menu is using fresh local seafood, (NO COMMA) and maui-grown veggies and fruit.
Now, if you are looking for the perfect romantic night out, try a dinner at Merriman’s. They have a great oceanfront location, (NO COMMA) and wonderfull views of the sunset. (JUST ONE SUNSET?) Although the price is very expensive and the portions are small, Merriman’s has great food (COMMA) and it's beautifully presented! Maui’s restaurants are well worth eating at. (Try not to end sentences with a preposition, which requires an object. "At" what? "Visiting" might be a better substitute.)
Although it cannot detect all your spelling errors (e.g., form, from), using a spell checker application is helpful.
Here is some help with commas:
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_commaproof.html
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I hope this helps a little more. Thanks for asking.
Here is the proofread paragraph with the topic, details, and concluding sentence included, as well as an evaluation for fragments, run-ons, and mention of price and location:
"Here are a few restaurants you must visit on your vacation to Maui. If you're looking for a very good meal at a price far below fancier restaurants, Paia Fish Market is a great place for you to start. Paia Fish Market is known for a long line, but it's well worth the wait, and they are also a great place to meet locals. They are especially famous for their great fish tacos. Another place you must visit is the BigWave Café, known for their Meatloaf Wednesdays. The prices at BigWave Café are a little more on the expensive side. The chef, Raul Bermudez, is world-famous, and his focus on the menu is using fresh local seafood and Maui-grown veggies and fruit. Now, if you're looking for the perfect romantic night out, try a dinner at Merriman's. They have a great oceanfront location and wonderful views of the sunset. Although the price is expensive and the portions are small, Merriman's serves great food and it's beautifully presented. Maui's restaurants are well worth eating at."
Evaluation:
- Topic: The topic of the paragraph is "Restaurants you must visit on your vacation to Maui."
- Details: The paragraph provides details about three restaurants - Paia Fish Market, BigWave Café, and Merriman's. It mentions their specialties, prices, chefs, and features.
- Concluding Sentence: The concluding sentence states, "Maui's restaurants are well worth eating at," summarizing the paragraph and expressing the overall recommendation.
- Fragments or run-ons: The proofread paragraph does not contain any fragments or run-ons.
- Price and location: The paragraph mentions the price of the restaurants, including Paia Fish Market being more affordable, BigWave Café being more expensive, and Merriman's being expensive with smaller portions. It also mentions Merriman's great oceanfront location.